Question

【题目】你在与笔友Neil信件交往多年，了解到了他以下一些信息，请根据下表提示要点以“My friend Neil”为题写一篇100词左右的文章向你的俱乐部成员介绍他的情况。（文章开头已给，不计入词数。）

基本情况	40多岁，妻子2年前死于癌症，至今仍单身。
兴趣爱好	最喜欢Jackie Chan饰演的电影，……（写一个原因）。
	很有绘画天赋，以致每次画画时倘佯在色彩的世界里。
往事经历	曾参加游戏节目获大奖，当时……（心情）。
	上月接到好友Sarah的求助短信，协助警方成功地……（自己发挥一点）。
愿望理想	希望能邂逅一个充满爱心的女子，并与之相爱结婚； 虽然很喜欢表演，但宁愿做一名世界闻名的导演。

My pen friend Neil

Hello, everyone! Neil is my pen friend. We have been penfriends for a long time. Now let me tell you something about him.

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Answer 1

【答案】

My pen friend Neil

Hello, everyone! Neil is my pen friend. We have been penfriends for a long time. Now let me tell you something about him.

He’s in his forties. His wife died cancer 2 years ago, but he is still single now. Neil likes the films Jackie Chan has acted in because they successfully join humour and exciting action together, not only for his success in action films, but also for his efforts in charity work. He has such a real gift for painting that he enjoys himself in the world of colors whenever every time he paints.

He once took part in a game show and won a big prize. He was too excited to say a word. Last month he received a message from his good friend Sarah for help and he succeeded in helping/successfully helped the police catch the thief.

He hopes to meet a lady with a heart full of love and fall in love with each other and at last marry her. Although he likes acting very much, he’d rather be a world-famous director.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们根据所给信息，来介绍一下自己的笔友Neil。题目以表格的方式给出了提示。这些信息包括了他的基本情况、兴趣爱好、往事经历以及愿望理想等。写作时，我们可以根据需要将这些信息进行重新整理和安排，使文章的意思衔接更自然。而且关于介绍人物时所使用的词汇和句型，最好用比较熟悉的，所以将平时的积累发挥出来就可以。当然我们要尽量使用一些好的句型和连词，使文章上下文意思连贯，更出彩。

写作亮点：这是一篇非常优秀的作文，短文中作者按照题目的要求，给我们介绍了自己的笔友Neil，结构清晰，要点全面。而且作者在写作时，并不是完全按照题目中给出的顺序，逐句翻译的，而是将这些信息进行了整合，让意思关联紧密的放在一起表达，这一点很好。短文中的语言合乎英语的表达规范，而且作者还使用了一些较好的句式，增强了文章的连贯性。如合成词penfriends、动词短语He once took part in a game show and won a big prize.、介词短语He’s in his forties.、连词not only for his success in action films, but also for his efforts in charity work等。