Question

【题目】书面表达。

假如星期天你和朋友一起去仁爱农场（Ren’ai Farm）去野餐，请对当时的情况展开合理的想象，以David的身份给Mary写一封信，写一篇70词左右的短文。（注意书信格式）

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mary,

How is it going? I hope you are fine. I want to tell to something about myself.

On Sunday, my friends and I went to Ren’ai Farm to have a picnic. We met at eight in the morning and went there by bike. It took us about one hour to get there. The farm was very big and there were a lot of animals such as sheep, pigs, geese and so on. We had a picnic on the grass. We took our lunch there. We had some bread, beef, orange juice and some fruits. When we ate, we could see many trees and small hills. It was very beautiful. We enjoyed ourselves. Though we were tired, we were very happy.

Best wishes.

Yours sincerely,

David

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以David的身份，给Mary写一封信，给她介绍你周日和朋友们去仁爱农场野餐的事情。题目中并没有规定我们要写什么内容，因此具体的情况需要我们自己展开想象，这对于学生们来说是比较困难的，在文中，学生们要合理想象野餐的情景，要有内容，也要符合题目的要求。如我们可以考虑写清楚什么时候去的，怎么去的，在那里看到了什么、做了些什么等。因为这是描述一件已经发生了的事情，因此这篇短文我们应使用一般过去时态，我们要注意谓语动词形式的变化，尤其是不规则动词的过去式形式。写作时，还需要使用一些较好的句型和短语，使文章的表达流畅、连贯。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的作文，短文中作者给我们描写了他和朋友去仁爱农场野餐的事情，根据题目要求，作者展开了合理的想象，使短文的内容非常充实、完整。首先作者写了他和朋友是什么时候、如何去农场的；然后描写了他们在那里所看到的东西；重点写了他们的野餐情况，最后还写了对这次活动的感受。其次作者使用了正确的时态和人称，全文主要使用了一般过去时态，动词都变成他们的过去式，尤其是一些不规则的动词，如took, ate, had, went等。最后作文中也有一些比较好的句式，如It took us about one hour to get there、The farm was very big and there were a lot of animals such as sheep, pigs, geese and so on、When we ate, we could see many trees and small hills、We enjoyed ourselves. Though we were tired, we were very happy.等等。