Question

10．假如你是李华，就个人爱好带来的困惑给英国朋友Stephen发电子邮件进行交流并请求帮助．
要点：

李华	爱好	对太空旅行感兴趣；经常到图书馆阅读资料
	困惑	得不到老师理解
	观点	1．个人爱好有助于学习； 2．…（至少一点）
老师	观点	时间应花在功课上；成绩就是一切

注意：1．词数：80个左右（开头和结尾已给出的内容不记入总词数）；
     2．内容必须包括上表中的要点，可适当发挥，但不要逐字翻译；
     3．条理清楚、语句连贯；
文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名．
Dear Stephen，
I am writing to tell you about my problem with my teacher．I don't know how to deal with it and would like your help．You know I am crazy about space travel．In my spare time I often go to the library to find something to read．This makes my teacher very angry．To him，good marks are everything and I should spend more time on my lessons，even at weekends．
I think healthy hobbies are helpful for our studies．If I can achieve a balance between my schoolwork and my hobby，it will be of great value to my future development．But I don't think my teacher understands me．I feel bad about that．
What shall I do？Can you offer me some suggestions？I am looking forward to your early reply．
Best wishes
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是就个人爱好带来的困惑给英国朋友Stephen发电子邮件进行交流并请求帮助．注意邮件的格式．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
一、爱好：对太空旅行感兴趣；经常到图书馆阅读资料
二、困惑：得不到老师理解
三、观点：1．个人爱好有助于学习；
2．…（至少一点）
四、老师的观点：时间应花在功课上；成绩就是一切
常用到的重点短语：
be crazy about对…痴迷
make sb+adj让某人怎么样
spend+时间+on sth花时间做某事
between…and…在…和…之间（两者之间）

高分句型
1．①In my spare time I often go to the library ②to find something ③to read．
①in one's  spare time 在某人的业余时间
②to find something动词不定式做目的状语
③to read．做后置定语，修饰something．
2．①If I can achieve a balance ②between my schoolwork and my hobby，it will ③be of great value to my future development．
①if引导的条件状语从句，主将从现．
②between…and…在…和…之间，介词短语．
③be of great value=be valuable，有价值的…

解答 Dear Stephen，
I am writing to tell you about my problem with my teacher．I don't know how to deal with it and would like your help．
You know I am crazy about space travel．In my spare time I often go to the library to find something to read．【高分句型】（爱好）This makes my teacher very angry．（困惑）To him，good marks are everything and I should spend more time on my lessons，even at weekends．（老师的观点）
I think healthy hobbies are helpful for our studies．If I can achieve a balance between my schoolwork and my hobby，it will be of great value to my future development．【高分句型】But I don't think my teacher understands me．I feel bad about that．（我的观点）
What shall I do？Can you offer me some suggestions？I am looking forward to your early reply．
Best wishes
Li Hua

点评 本图表所给材料比较详细，考生要做的就是把这些内容用正确的英语表达出来．动笔前要认真阅读材料，不可遗漏要点，并需有适当发挥．要注意句式的多样性，适当的使用宾语从句，转折词however，连词and等．考生可在作文之前对每部分列出大致的提纲，做到主题明确，条理清楚．可以根据所给提纲或已知信息列出每段的主题句，为全文的展开做好铺垫．注意行文连贯，书写规范，不要出现一些诸如语法或词汇的错误．