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请根据下列提示写一篇词数为80左右的日记（开头已为你写好）
假如你是李明，今年国庆节游览了世界自然奇观之—黄山。黄山位于安徽省的南部，每年都能吸引数以百万计的游客来游览。清晨，你乘小车到达黄山，那时天正在下雨。你一下车就开始登山。大约半小时后，云开始散开，雨停了，太阳也出来了。在登山过程中，你领略了黄山的云海、奇松(wondrous pines)、怪石(unique rocks)等秀丽的风景。www.21-cn-jy.com
October1, Tuesday
Today I visited the Yellow Mountain, one of the wonders of the natural world.                              
                                                                       

Answer 1

October1, Tuesday                                              
Rainy & fine
Today I visited the Yellow Mountain, one of the wonders of the natural world. The Yellow Mountain lies in the south of Anhui Province and attracts millions of tourists every year. Early in the morning, when I arrived there by car, it was raining. As soon as I got out of the car, I began to climb the mountain. About half an hour later, the clouds suddenly began to clear and the rain stopped. The sun also rose beyond the rocks. While I was climbing the mountain, I enjoyed the sea of clouds, wondrous pines and unique rocks. I really had a good time

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以李明的身份来记叙去黄山的一次旅行，简单介绍一下黄山的风景。在题目中给出了我们具体的写作的提纲，包括黄山的地理位置，黄山的风景特色，你的行程等。我们需要用正确的英语将这些内容翻译出来，注意书写是调理，按照时间的顺序，同时有去黄山的交通工具，当时的天气情况等这些小的要点，不要遗漏。因为这里是记叙一次旅行，故本篇短文应该使用一般过去时态，所以要注意每句话中的谓语动词的形式。同时注意表达的流畅。
【亮点说明】这是一篇很优秀的范文。在这篇短文中作者将自己去黄山的这次旅行完整、细致的描写了出来，语言准确，时态、人称运用合理，表达也很流畅。作者主要就是按照题目中给出的这些要点，将这次旅行按照时间的顺序记录了下来。同时注意了语句之间的衔接，使文章表达完整、流畅。文章比较好的句子有attracts millions of tourists every year.、As soon as I got out of the car, I began to climb the mountain.、The sun also rose beyond the rocks、I enjoyed the sea of clouds, wondrous pines and unique rocks等。