Question

【题目】书面表达 10分

根据以下提示，写一篇80词左右的短文。 开头已给出，不计入总词数。

1. Mary是印度一个贫困家庭的孩子。

2. 过去他们家太穷了，他没钱上学，只好在农场干活。每天早起晚归，十分辛苦。

3. 他多么希望自己能够上学啊！有一天， 一位UNICEF的工作人员来到他的村庄，了解了他家的情况后，给他提供了上学的钱。

4. Mary 现在在校读书， 他长大后也想成为一位UNICEF的工作人员，帮助更多贫困的孩子。

Mary is a child from a poor family in India.

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

Mary is a child from a poor family in India.

. His family were very poor in the past, and she had no money to go to school. So she had to work on the farm all day, she could neither read nor write. She wished she could go to school! One day , a staff of the UNCIFE came to her village. After learning about her condition, the staff gave her money and afforded her to go to school. Now Mandeep studies at school, and she can read and write. She wants to be a staff of theUNCIFE when she grows up, and help more poor children.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，介绍Mary在UNCIFE的工作人员的资助下会读也会写的故事。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般过去时和一般现在时态，人称为第三人称，注意主谓一致问题，比如：Lisa is....；They were...；she had to ....；the staff gave....；She wants to...等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系，注意文后要把提纲的内容表达完整。

写作亮点：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了Mary的过去，接下来介绍在UNCIFE的工作人员的资助下，她能去上学，最后指出她希望长大后，帮助更多的贫穷孩子。此处用了 in the past，all day, learning about，afforded her to ，wants to 等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。