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17．话题作文：近来网络上流行一句话："世界上最远的距离是我在你对面，你却在看手机．"这句话真实反映了当前的社会现象，"手机控"，"低头族"越来越多且呈年轻化趋势．请你以"My opinion on using the mobile phone"为题针对这一现象发表个人观点，并提出改进建议．
提示词：a mobile phone freak 手机控．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇话题作文．通过审题，分析需要包含下列内容：当前手机的普遍使用；当前的使用手机现象，"手机控""低头族"；不恰当使用手机对人的危害；自己的观点、建议和希望．根据内容分析，可以采用四段式．首先简要介绍当前手机的普遍使用；其次引入当前的使用手机现象，"手机控""低头族"； 接着可以写不恰当使用手机对人的危害；然后再写自己的观点、建议和希望．时态为一般现在时．注意句子或段落语义连贯，表达合理准确，语法结构准确，可以适当加入一些连接词语．

解答 参考范文：
          My opinion on using the mobile phones
    Mobile phones are widely used these days．More and more people use mobile phones to do different kinds of things，such as chatting and shopping．But they spend too much time on the mobile phones．More and more mobile phone freaks appear．Not only the adults but also the children are members of them．
    I don't think it's normal．Watching mobile phones too much is bad for our eyes．We have little time to exercise．It's not good for our health．We pay more attention to it，it influences our study and lives．We have less and less time to communicate with others．
    In my opinion，we can do something meaningful instead of playing with the mobile phones all the time．Reading，exercising，visiting friends and communicating with families are also good ways to spend your free time．
    I hope people can use the mobile phones correctly．

点评 写话题作文，关键要仔细审题，找出题目所包含的信息．其次要根据题目里表达时间的词语把握好时态．最后注意关联词的使用．