Question

9．你学校最近开展"美好校园"的系列活动，你参加了"美好校园，从我做起"的演讲，请以"Start out small"为题，写一篇演讲辞，内容必须包括：
1．描述图中校园内的不良行为；
2．自由发挥，描述其他一至两点校园内的不良行为；
3．发表你的校园文明倡议．

注意：1．词数80左右（文章开头已给出，不计入词数）；
2．不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分．
Start out small
Hello，everyone．It's nice to speak about what we can do for our school…Firstly，in order to save water，we should never forget to turn off the tap after we wash hands or other things．But some of us often forget it．Secondly，we should protect the trees and grass which make our school beautiful．For example，we should follow the rules and not play football on the grass．Besides，don't litter around．It's a good habit to put the rubbish into the rubbish can and keep our school clean and tidy．At last，we shouldn't write on the wall．Let's start out small．Only in this way can we make our school beautiful．So we can study in a beautiful and comfortable environment．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图画作文．内容是以"Start out small"为题，根据图中的学校中不文明行为发表倡议．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．描述图画；忘关水龙头，草地上踢足球，乱扔垃圾
2．倡议；
 
常用到的重点短语：
in order to为了
turn off 关掉
forget to do sth忘记做某事
keep sth+adj 保持某物怎样
follow the rules 遵守规则

【高分句型】
1．Firstly，①in order to save water，we should never ②forget to turn off the tap ③after we wash hands or other things．
①in order to为了，做目的状语．
②forget to do sth忘记做某事，turn off 关掉
③after引导的时间状语从句．
2．Secondly，we should protect the trees and grass①which②make our school beautiful．
①which作为关系词的定语从句，which作为从句的主语．修饰先行词the trees and grass
②make sth+adj 让某人怎么样
3．Only in this way can we make our school beautiful．
only短语放句首引起主谓倒装．

解答 Start out small
Hello，everyone．It's nice to speak about what we can do for our school．Firstly，in order to save water，we should never forget to turn off the tap after we wash hands or other things．【高分句型】But some of us often forget it．（第一幅图）Secondly，we should protect the trees and grass which make our school beautiful．【高分句型】For example，we should follow the rules and not play football on the grass．（第二幅图）Besides，don't liter around．It's a good habit to put the rubbish into the rubbish can and keep our school clean and tidy．（第三幅图）At last，we shouldn't write on the wall．（第四幅图）Let's start out small．Only in this way can we make our school beautiful．【高分句型】So we can study in a beautiful and comfortable environment．（倡议）

点评 这是一篇图片作文．根据图片内容和要求，以"美好校园，从我做起"为主题描述一些校园内不文明现象，图片已经给出我们三点提示，要求我们自己适当发挥，再写出一条．根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，注意时态语时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题．写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．
这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少．如：in order to"为了"；forget to do sth"忘记做某事"；It's a good habit to do put the rubbish into the rubbish．"将垃圾扔进垃圾箱是好习惯．"以及倒装句的使用．学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理．