Question

【题目】书面表达：（本题15分）

我们生活在同一蓝天下，但现在中国的雾霾天气越来越严重。现在请你以一个中学生的角度写一篇短文，内容包括：1、简单介绍雾霾的形成2、对人们身体和生活上的危害（如导致人们尤其是小孩和老人呼吸问题，也许会导致癌症，由于雾霾也发生了许多的交通事故，等等）3、如何治理雾霾发表自己的观点。

要求：1、不能照抄信息归纳的内容；不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生的真实姓名；

2、语句连贯，词数80左右。

Answer 1

【答案】

In recent years, people’s living condition has improved a lot. But the smog has become more and more seriously. The smog is caused by the factory, and more and more people have personal cars. The smog has done great harm to our daily life. many traffic accidents happened just because of the heavy smog weather, a great number of people have to go to see the doctor because the serious disease caused by the smog, quite a lot of flights have to be put off.

The earth is our home, we should protect the environment. According to me, I will go to school by bike or on foot, and I won’t throw the waste anywhere. What’s more, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can. Would you like to tell me some good idea?

Let try our best to protect our home and make it more and more beautiful.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们根据所给信息，来写一篇关于雾霾的短文。题目中有关雾霾的具体信息，我们应用正确的英语将这些内容表达出来。写作时，我们可以根据需要将这些信息进行重新整理和安排，使文章的意思衔接更自然。当然我们要尽量使用一些好的句型和连词，使文章上下文意思连贯，更出彩。

写作亮点：这是一篇非常优秀的作文，短文中作者按照题目的要求，给我们介绍了雾霾的形成及危害，结构清晰，要点全面。而且作者在写作时，并不是完全按照题目中给出的顺序，逐句翻译的，而是将这些信息进行了整合，让意思关联紧密的放在一起表达，这一点很好。短文中的语言合乎英语的表达规范，而且作者还使用了一些较好的句式，增强了文章的连贯性。如What’s more, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can；Let try our best to protect our home and make it more and more beautiful等。