Question

【题目】书面表达

危险无处不在，我们学生应该处处注意安全，远离危险。请你根据下面表格所提供的信息，写一篇题为“Always Be Careful”的英语短文。要求90词左右。

在 家	看完电视后，及时关机。 独自在家时，不要让陌生人进屋。 不邀请网友来家。
在学校	不要在教室里互相追逐。 做体育运动时，注意保护自己。
在路上	遵守交通规则，过马路时，注意交通指示灯。 ……（请自拟一点内容）

Always Be Careful

As a middle school student, we should try to stay away from danger as the problem of safety is becoming more and more serious.

If all these are kept in mind, you are sure to enjoy a much safer life.

Answer 1

【答案】

Always Be Careful

As a middle school student, we should try to stay away from danger as the problem of safety is becoming more and more serious.

After watching TV, you should turn it off in time. If you’re at home alone, don’t open the door for strangers or invite friends online to your home. While you are at school, running after each other in the classroom can be dangerous. At the same time, you should remember to protect yourself while doing sports. When you are in the street, traffic rules should be obeyed all the time. For example, never listen to music while you are riding a bike. Besides, always follow the traffic lights when you cross the street.

If all these are kept in mind, you are sure to enjoy a much safer life.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以Always Be careful为题，介绍在我们生活中应如何注意安全，避免危险。题目中给我们列出了具体的写作内容，主要分成三个方面，在家、在学校和在路上，从这三个方面分别来介绍如何小心仔细，避免危险。其中在路上这一部分，需要学生们自己再拟一条内容补充，这就需要学生自己发挥想象力，联系生活实际，补充完整。通过分析可知，这篇作文我们应主要使用一般现在时态，第二人称you来叙述，要注意句中谓语动词形式的变化，使用平时积累的词汇和短语，多使用简单句，要符合英语的表达规范，不要写汉语式的英语。注意上下文的连贯，使用一些简单的连词或副词，使文章的表达连贯、流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文，首先短文的内容完整，包含了题目所给出的所有要点，没有遗漏，需要学生补充的内容，也符合整体表达的需要；其次短文的结构清晰，写得很有条理。短文共分成三个方面，分别介绍了在家、在学校和在路上应该如何做来避免危险；最后短文中的表达符合英语的规范，时态和人称正确，谓语动词的变化也符合规则，文章中还使用了一些较好的句式，如After watching TV, you should turn it off in time. 、If you’re at home alone, don’t open the door for strangers or invite friends online to your home.、At the same time, you should remember to protect yourself while doing sports、Besides, always follow the traffic lights when you cross the street.等。