Question

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Daniel最近迷上了手机游戏，经常玩到深夜。现在他因为睡眠不足，上课不能认真听课，成绩也在下降。他妈妈很生气，不再让他使用手机。假如你是他的朋友Tina，请你写一封信给他，建议他要合理使用手机，如查阅资料、记单词等。同时，考试在即，要理解父母、老师的心情，要主动去沟通，得到他们的原谅和帮助。

要求：

1.包含所给的要点，语言流畅，意思连贯，适当扩展。

2.词数：90词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总次数。

Dear Daniel，

I am sorry to hear that you quarrelled with your parents about playing mobile phone games．

                                                                                           

                                                                                           

                                                                                            

                                                                                           

                                                                                           

                                                                                            

                                                                                           

                                                                                            

                                    

I hope my suggestions are of great value to you．

Yours，

Tina

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Dear Daniel，

   I am sorry to hear that you quarreled with your parents about playing mobile phone games.

   You spent so much time playing games that you forgot when to sleep and you felt too sleepy and tired to listen to the teachers in class the next day. Because of these, you became poor in your study. Your mother got angry with you. You felt bad about this.

   Firstly, I think you should stop playing games. You can use mobile phone to search for information, and look up new words.It is a useful tool in your study.

   Secondly, you need to communicate with your parents and teachers, and let them know your problems. They will help you. at the same time, they will forgive you for your mistakes.

   I hope my suggestions are of great value to you.

Yours，

Tina

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文。本文所给材料比较详细，我们要做的就是用正确的英语把这些内容表达出来。动笔前要认真阅读材料，不可遗漏要点，并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般过去时态，主语是第二人称，注意时态时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】

这篇短文准确委婉地对当事人进行了劝说，语言得体，措辞有力，并使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少.如: spent so much time playing games花费大量时间玩游戏so...that...如此......以至于；they will forgive you for your mistakes.他们会原谅你的过错的。I hope my suggestions are of great value to you.我希望我的建议能对你有价值以及过渡词 Firstly, Secondly, 的恰当使用等，都体现了习作者扎实的基本功和语言功底。

考点：提纲作文。