Question

13．时光荏苒，三年的初中生活即将过去．在这三年中，一定有某个你特别难忘的日子．请你以"What a/an             day!"为题，写一篇短文，描述你印象深刻的一天．空白处可填入 happy，sad，relaxing 等词．
要求：1．结构清晰，语言准确、内容充实；
2．词数80左右．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：But I think the Clean-up Day is the most unforgettable of all the things that have happened．但我认为清洁日是所有发生的事情中最难忘的一天．本句是一个由think引导的宾语从句；后面是一个由that引导的定语从句，先行词是all the things，被all所修饰，故只能用that．
高分句型二：All of us felt very tired but we still felt very happy，because we all gave our own energy to make the school become better and better．我们都感到很累，但我们仍然感到非常高兴，因为我们都付出了自己的精力，使学校变得越来越好．这是由because引导的原因状语从句； better and better越来越好．

解答 What a happy day!
       It's the last term for us to study in our school．Thinking back on the past three years，I have taken part in many activities with my classmates．But I think the Clean-up Day is the most unforgettable of all the things that have happened．（高分句型一）（开篇点题）
　　On the afternoon of a sunny day，all of my classmates took the tools and went to the playground．Some of us swept the floor，some picked the litter up and the others watered the flowers．（具体的活动）
　　At last，the whole school became brighter and cleaner．All of us felt very tired but we still felt very happy，because we all gave our own energy to make the school become better and better．（高分句型二）（活动后的收获和感想）

点评 （1）句型多样化，不要I（We）…到底，使人觉得乏味．（2）适当使用一些并列句或主从复合句．（3）进一步描绘人或事物时，适当使用定语从句．（4）适当使用分词或分词短语，烘托谓语动词．（5）偶尔使用一下倒装句，增加新鲜感．