Question

11．在日常学习和生活中，你一定得到过很多人的帮助和关爱，此时此刻你会有很多感谢的话要说．请根据下面所给的提示用英语写一篇短文．
提示：1．感谢的人：亲人、老师、同学…
2．感谢他们的原因：生活方面、学习方面…
3．对他们的美好祝福．
要求：1．内容包括所给提示；
2．写作中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3．语句通顺，意思连贯，语法正确，书写规范；
4.100词左右，文章开头已给出，不计入词数．
In my life，I get lots of help and love from many people．Now，I want to express my thanks to them．First，I want to thank my parents．They provide a happy life for me．They do much for me and give me so much love．Second，I want to thank my teachers．They are always busy doing their work．When I have problems with my study，they are so patient and helpful．Third，I want to thank my classmates．They make me feel less lonely．I will remember the days we play and study together．
Thank you，my parents，my teacher and my classmates．I hope you are in good health and have a better future．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是谈谈你在日常学习和生活中想要感激的人，以及为什么感谢他们和祝愿．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称和第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．感谢的人：亲人、老师、同学…
2．感谢他们的原因：生活方面、学习方面…
3．对他们的美好祝福．
常用到的重点短语：
provide sth for sb为某人提供某物
be busy doing sth忙于…
make sb do sth 让某人做某事
be in good health身体健康

【高分句型】
1．①When I②have problems with my study，they are so patient and helpful．
①when引导的时间状语从句．
②have problems with …在某方面有困难

2．I will remember the days we play and study together．
we play and study together是定语从句，修饰先行词the days，关系词which作为从句宾语，故省略．

解答 In my life，I get lots of help and love from many people．Now I want to express my thanks to them．First，I want to thank my parents．They provide a happy life for me．They do much for me and give me so much love．（感谢父母及原因）Second，I want to thank my teachers．They are always busy doing their work．When I have problems with my study，they are so patient and helpful．【高分句型】（感谢老师及原因）Third，I want to thank my classmates．They make me feel less lonely．I will remember the days we play and study together．【高分句型】（感谢同学及原因）
Thank you，my parents，my teacher and my classmates．I hope you are in good health and have a better future．（美好祝愿）

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．