Question

【题目】作文

张明是个很聪明的学生，但他有一些不好的习惯，请你根据下面提供的信息，用英文写一 篇短文，并针对他存在的一些问题提出合理的建议。

姓名	张明
班级	七年级一班
外貌	大眼睛、矮而胖，短发，戴眼镜
喜欢	唱歌、玩电脑游戏，喜欢吃汉堡、喝可乐
不喜欢	不喜欢游泳、跑步，不喜欢吃蔬菜
其它	常去他家前面的购物中心，离他家不远
建议	至少两条

具体要求：

1. 不少于100词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。

2. 语句通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，字迹工整。

3. 内容必须包括以上所有要点，不要逐字翻译，可适当发挥。

Zhang Ming is a clever student.________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

Li Ming is a clever student. He lives in Beijing.He studies in Beijing Sunshine Middle School.

He is in Class 1, Grade 7. He is good at Geography and History. He isn’t tall. He has big eyes and short hair. He wears glasses. He always wears trainers because they are light and comfortable.

He likes singing and playing computer games. He likes having snacks between meals, but he doesn’t like eating vegetables. He also dislikes swimming and running.

He often goes to the shopping mall in front of his home. It’s not far away from / near his home. It’s a good place to meet friends.

I think he must change his lifestyle. He should eat more vegetables because they are good for his health. He also needs to do some exercise like playingbasketballand running in his free time.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来.动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。

写作亮点：范文中出现一些常见短语：is good at擅长做某事likes singing喜欢做某事in front of在。。前面far away from与。。很远are good for对。。有好处。He always wears trainers because they are light and comfortable这个句子中becaue连接两个因果关系的句子。He likes having snacks between meals, but he doesn’t like eating vegetables.这个句子中but表示转折。He also needs to do some exercise like playingbasketballand running in his free time.这个句子中need是个实义动词需要，need to do需要做某事，like是介词表示 象。。，and连接playing,running并列，所以时态保持一致。