Question

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众所周知，美丽的校园环境对我们的学习和生活是非常重要的。它能够使我们感觉舒适和有动力，我们的学习效率将会得到极大地提高。然而，在校园内却仍然有着一些不文明的现象和行为：随处乱丢垃圾、在课桌上或者墙上乱涂乱画、随手不关灯或者水龙头、图书馆和阅览室内随意交谈、课上睡觉、践踏草坪和攀折花木、随地吐痰等等。因此，创建美丽校园、做文明中学生已经变得刻不容缓。作为中学生，我们应该怎么做呢？请以“How to make our school beautiful”为题，用英语写一篇词数80左右的短文。

内容要求：

1. 写出你所发现一些不文明的现象和行为，并适当评议。

2. 提出你对创建美丽校园的建议。

提示词（可选用）：

Environment，important，comfortable，active，behavior，make rules，draw

How to make our school beautiful

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

How to make our school beautiful

As we know, the beautiful school environment is very important to our study and school life. It will make us feel comfortable and active. Then we can study well and live a happy school life every day. However, we can easily see some students break the school rules, such as throwing litter around, drawing pictures on the walls or desks, talking loudly in the reading room, sleeping in class, picking flowers and trees and so on. Their behavior is so bad that it influences the look of our school a lot. And it will do great harm to our study and school life. So we should try our best to be good students and make our school more beautiful.

But as students, what should we do then? Here are some suggestions. First we should never throw litter around. When we found litter, we should throw it to the dustbin. Also, we shouldn’t let the tap going. If everyone can do these, our school will become more beautiful.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以How to make our school beautiful为题写一篇作文，内容主要包括两个方面：一是列举一些自己身边存在的不文明行为和现象，并加以评论；而是为创建美丽校园，提出自己的建议。写作时，我们可以按照题目的这一要求分成两段来写。首先我们先想想自己身边的一些不文明行为，例如乱扔垃圾、不随手关水龙头、践踏草坪、随处吐痰等。我们可以用一些短语将这些行为罗列出来，当然这些行为对我们的校园环境都是不好的，我们应该尽力改掉这些不好的行为。第二段中针对如何创建美丽校园提出一些建议，如组织志愿者监督、从每个同学自身做起等。本文主要应该使用一般现在时态，第一人称复数的形式，注意表达的规范，以及语句的连贯。

【亮点说明】这是一篇比较不错的短文，作者按照题目要求写了如何创建美丽校园。本文的优点有两个:一是整篇短文的结构比较好，层次比较清楚。作者分成两段展开叙述，第一段是列举身边的一些不文明行为；第二段中作者提出了自己的一些建议。第二个优点是短文中使用的句型、句式比较丰富，短语和词汇比较准确。如As we know、live a happy school life、However, we can easily see some students break the school rules、such as、Their behavior is so bad that it influences the look of our school a lot、it will do great harm to our study and school life、So we should try our best to be good students and make our school more beautiful等。但是本文也有做得不够好的地方，主要体现在一是第一段占篇幅较长，再就是第二段，提建议的这一段稍显单调。

考点：提纲类作文。