Question

5．假设你是Emma，你的笔友Josh给你写了一封电子邮件，向你倾诉他在家里的一些烦恼．请根据来信和提示，给Josh回一封电子邮件．先说说你的看法，再给出建议，并适当发挥．
提示：1．内容要点：（1）看法：在父母看来，我们仍是孩子；父母这样做是为了保护我们．
（2）建议：给父母写信谈谈你的想法；主动帮你父母做些力所能及的事情．
2．回信应包括以上所有提示的信息，做到行文连贯，不要逐字翻译．
3．词数：不少于80．开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数．

Dear Josh，
Thanks for your e-mail．I have ever had the same experience．I even had a fight with my parents．But now，I understand them．We are growing up，but often，it's hard for our parents to see this．To them，weare still children and they want to protect us．
Sometimes，it's hard for you to talk to your parents．Here's an idea：Write your mother and father a letter．In the letter，tell your parents what you are thinking about．Then maybe they will understand you better．After your parents read the letter，try to talk to them．In your free time，you'd better do something you can to help your parents．For example，you can help your parents with some housework．
What's more，you can describe your friends to your parents and tell them more about you and your life．

I hope this helps!
Emma．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是针对Josh的来信中说到的家里的一些烦恼谈谈看法以及给出建议．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第二人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
（1）看法：在父母看来，我们仍是孩子；父母这样做是为了保护我们．
（2）建议：给父母写信谈谈你的想法；主动帮你父母做些力所能及的事情．

常用到的重点短语：
It's+adj+for sb．to do sth．对某人来说做某事是怎么样的
try to do sth 尽力做某事
grow up 长大
talk to sb 与某人交谈
in one's free time 在某人空闲时
help sb with sth 帮助某人做某事
What's more 另外 而且

高分句型：
1．We are growing up，①but often，②it's hard for our parents to see this．
①but 但是，是连词，表示转折，不能与although虽然连用．
②It's+adj+for sb．to do sth．对某人来说做某事是怎么样的．这里的形容词是对动作的一般性描述．
2．①In your free time，②you'd better do something ③you can ④to help your parents．
①in one's free time在某人空闲时．
②had better do sth 最好做某事，常用来表示提出建议．
③you can是定语从句，修饰先行词something不定代词，省略了关系词that做为定语从句的宾语．
④to help your parents 动词不定式做目的状语．

解答 Dear Josh，
    Thanks for your e-mail．I have ever had the same experience．I even had a fight with my parents．But  now，I understand them．We are growing up，but often，it's hard for our parents to see this．（高分句型）To them，we are still children and they want to protect us．（我的看法）
     Sometimes，it's hard for you to talk to your parents．Here's an idea：Write your mother and father a letter．In the letter，tell your parents what you are thinking about．Then maybe they will understand you better．After your parents read the letter，try to talk to them．（写信谈谈你的想法） In your free time，you'd better do something you can to help your parents．（高分句型）For example，you can help your parents with some housework．（主动帮你父母）
     What's more，you can describe your friends to your parents and tell them more about you and your life．
     I hope this helps!
     Emma

点评 此为材料作文，要仔细审题，抓住重点，将所给信息条理清楚的表达出来，可使用一些表示顺序的词，使论述更明确，更有层次感．还要注意多使用一些委婉的提建议的句型，尽量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥单调．要求语句通顺，语法，词汇，时态正确，书写规范．