Question

14．本学期开始，学校为了建设"文明校园"，开展了争做"好学生"活动．请根据下表提示，以"Great changes in our school"为题，介绍学校开展活动以来同学们所发生的变化，并谈谈你的感想．

活动前	活动后
随意乱扔垃圾， 对师长不够礼貌， …	…
你的感想…

注意：1．词数不少于80．文章的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数．
2．要点完整、层次清晰、语法正确、上下文连贯．
3．文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名．
Great changes in our school
The activity of being a good student has been held since the beginning of this term in our school．Everybody has taken an active part in it．
In the past，we didn't have the habit of keeping our classroom clean and even threw waste everywhere．We weren't polite enough to our teachers and parents．Sometimes we were unwilling to greet them．While waiting for a bus or doing shopping，some of us jumped the queue instead of waiting in line．
But now，everyone is active in cleaning and doesn't throw waste freely any more．We show great respect for our teachers and parents．When we are in public places，we wait in line and offer our seats to the people in need．
The activity has brought us many advantages．Our school has changed a lot．The school is becoming more and more beautiful．More and more students have formed good habits．And we hope every student can keep these good habits．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是以"Great changes in our school"为题，介绍学校开展活动以来同学们所发生的变化，并谈谈你的感想．时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1． 活动前；随意乱扔垃圾，对师长不够礼貌，
2．活动后；
3．我的感想

常用到的重点短语：
take part in 参加
be unwilling to do sth 不情愿做某事
instead of 而不是…
not…any more 不再
offer sth to sb 给某人提供某物
比较级+and+比较级  越来越…
【高分句型】
1．We weren't polite enough to our teachers and parents．
not+adj+enough to do sth 不够怎样做某事
2．①While waiting for a bus or doing shopping，some of us ②jumped the queue ③instead of waiting in line．
①While waiting for a bus or doing shopping是while we are waiting for a bus or doing shopping．的缩写
②jump the queue插队
③instead of 而不是…，of是介词，后加名词代词或动名词．wait in line 排队等候
3．①When we are in public places，we wait in line and ②offer our seats to the people ③in need．
①when引导的时间状语从句
②offer sth to sb 给某人提供某物
③in need 作为后置定语，修饰people．

解答 The activity of being a good student has been held since the beginning of this term in our school．Everybody has taken an active part in it．
In the past，we didn't have the habit of keeping our classroom clean and even threw waste everywhere．We weren't polite enough to our teachers and parents．【高分句型】Sometimes we were unwilling to greet them．While waiting for a bus or doing shopping，some of us jumped the queue instead of waiting in line．【高分句型】（活动前）
But now，everyone is active in cleaning and doesn't throw waste freely any more．We show great respect for our teachers and parents．When we are in public places，we wait in line and offer our seats to the people in need．【高分句型】（活动后）
    The activity has brought us many advantages．Our school has changed a lot．The school is becoming more and more beautiful．More and more students have formed good habits．And we hope every student can keep these good habits．（我的感想）

点评 作文中给出的要点比较简略，故需要充实文章内容，需要注意不要偏离文章中心．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式．此外还要用适当的关联词把句子串联起来，使文章更加连贯．
动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果．并且注意字数限制