图示作文
根据画面内容和文字说明,写一段50~80个单词的对话.
要求:1.对话内容包括事件发生的时间、地点、原因、结果以及警察的建议和劝告.
2.要点齐全,表达正确,符合语境和逻辑.
对话内容已给出:
(P:Policeman L:Lin Tao)
P:What happened?
L:My bike hit a car.
P:…
L:…
学生:习作: P:What happened? L:My bike hit a car. P:Are you hurt badly? L:Lucky(X1) I am not. P:What about your bike? L:It is not broke(X2). P:That's good. What time did it happen? L:About ten minutes ago. P:And where? L:Around the corner near my school. P:How did it happen? L:Perhaps I rode too fast when I saw a car come(X3) to me. It tried stopping(X4), but my bike still hit the car. P:Well. Please be careful when you are riding. Don't ride too fast next time. It is very danger(X5). Take care of yourself. L:Thanks a lot. P:OK. Goodbye. L:Bye! 剖析: 1.修饰整个句子要用副词,所以此处的Lucky要改为luckily.2.此处应用过去分词broken作表语,而不可用过去式broke作表语. 3.感官动词see、hear、watch、notice、look at、listen to等的宾语补足语若接不带to的动词不定式,表示已完成的动作(即动作的全过程);若接v-ing形式,表示动作正在进行,试比较: I heard her sing an English song.我听她唱了一首英语歌(听完整首歌曲). I heard her singing an English song.我听见她正在唱英语歌. 此处是“看见一辆车正朝他开来”,故 come要改为coming.4.try to do是“试图或努力在做某事”,而try doing是“试着做某事,看会有什么结果”,文中是我努力、尽力刹车,所以要改为try to stop. 5.danger是名词,很显然文中有副词修饰,应改用形容词dangerous. 总评:作者能按对话格式写,充分表达出图画所示的意思,语言朴素达意.符合要求,但个别词用得不当. |
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