Question

【题目】书面表达

在八年级即将结束之际，八(1)班 将举行一次主题班会，要求同学们谈谈一年来自己的收获与变化。请为David准备一份100字左右的演讲稿，具体内容如下：

	过去	现在
学习	很少阅读，花时间在……	读书使我放松……
环保	浪费水电，随处乱抛垃圾	意识到环保的重要性，垃圾入桶
礼仪	大声喧哗，插队推挤	举止礼貌，主动让座
爱心	不知道如何关心他人	……
展望未来	相信自己在将来会越来越棒。

Hello, everyone. I’m David from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in many ways.

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Thanks for listening!

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, everyone. I’m David from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in many ways.

First, In the past I seldom read books. I used to spend most of my time playing computers games. Now I find it interesting to do some reading because good books help me relax after a busy day. They also open up a whole new world to me.

Second, I always forgot to turn off the tap and the power when they were not in use. Sometimes I left the tap running after I washed my hands. I always dropped litter carelessly in the park. But now I have realized the importance of protecting the environment. I always throw the litter into the rubbish bins.

Third, I was impolite before. I sometimes shouted loudly or pushed in before others in public places. Now, I can behave politely in public and I often give my seat to someone in need on the bus.

Fourth, I cared little about others. But now I offer to help my blind neighbors and donate all my pocket money to Project Hope.

I’m sure I will do better and better in Grade 9.

Thanks for listening!

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇表格作文。我们要用恰当的语言把所列举的内容准确地表达出来，但不能逐句翻译。写作中一年来自己的收获与变化要包含学习，环保，礼仪，爱心等几个方面。最后展望自己的未来。根据材料内容可知本文主要用一般现在时态与一般过去时态进行比较，展望自己的未来采用一般将来时态。注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题。写作中注意上下文的过度，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：这篇短文简明、扼要地阐明了表格中的基本信息，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息。文章语言规范，词汇及时态运用正确，能够把提示的内容叙述清楚，，First, Second, Third, Fourth, 的使用，使语句通顺，意思更连贯，Now I find it interesting to do some reading because good books help me relax after a busy day. They also open up a whole new world to me.语言很经典，是一篇不错的文章。