Question

5．学校将要举行演讲比赛，请以My Dream为题写一篇参赛演讲稿．注意：1．文中不能出现真实姓名和学校． 2．词数：80歌左右． 3．开头已经给出，不计入总词数．
My dream
Hi，everyoneEverybody has his dream job．I also have my dream job．My dream is to work for foreign tourists as a tour guide．
Why do I want to be a tour guide？First of all，I‘m an outgoing girl，and I like doing some exciting things．Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．Then I will tell the foreign tourists about our colorful history．Second，I like making friends．If I work as a tour guide，I can make a lot of friends all over the world．This may be great．Perhaps someday my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries．I really like to go to their countries to know something about their culture．What's more，I like singing．Singing English songs is my favorite．I believe I will be popular with foreign tourists．Their trip will be excellent．
Now，I am still a middle school student．My job now is to work hard in school．Then I'll go to university to learn something about being a tour guide．I'm sure I can be a qualified tour guide in the future．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇命题作文．内容以My Dream为题写一篇参赛演讲稿．时态主要为一般将来时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从两个大的方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．梦想是什么．
2．为什么有这样的梦想
3．怎样实现梦想．
常用到的重点短语：
want to be想要成为
First of all，Second，What's more首先，第二，更有甚者．
make friends交朋友
be popular with受欢迎
work hard努力学习
learn about学习关于…
in the future将来
高分句型：
Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．
本句是动名词短语being a tour guide 作为主语，谓语用is．还用最高级best来总结上文给出的原因说这是最好的选择．
If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．
本句是运用了if引导的时间状语从句，主句含有情态动词，从句用一般现在时代替一般将来．

解答 Hi，everyone．Everybody has his dream job．I also have my dream job．My dream is to work for foreign tourists as a tour guide．（梦想是什么．）
Why do I want to be a tour guide？First of all，I‘m an outgoing girl，and I like doing some exciting things．Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．（高分句型）If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．（高分句型）Then I will tell the foreign tourists about our colorful history．Second，I like making friends．If I work as a tour guide，I can make a lot of friends all over the world．This may be great．Perhaps someday my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries．I really like to go to their countries to know something about their culture．What's more，I like singing．Singing English songs is my favorite．I believe I will be popular with foreign tourists．Their trip will be excellent．（为什么有这样的梦想）
Now，I am still a middle school student．My job now is to work hard in school．Then I'll go to university to learn something about being a tour guide．I'm sure I can be a qualified tour guide in the future．（怎样实现梦想）

点评 这是一篇命题作文，要求同学们先根据题目列出提纲以及写作要点．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．