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Last summer holiday, my parents and I went to Beijing. On the first day, we went to the Great Wall. We took many photos there. Although we were very tired, we were very happy. On the second day, we visited the Summer Palace. There were many people there. We saw many flowers and grass there. They were very beautiful. We also learned much about our country. On the third day, we went shopping, hang out and ate some delicious food there. We had a good time. I want to go there again some day.

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们记叙一次去北京的旅行，在题目中给出了我们详细的信息，是关于在北京的旅行。我们需要用正确的英语将这三天的行程表达出来。因为这里说的是去年夏天的事情，所以整篇短文都需要用一般过去时，因此要注意每句话中的动词，都要用过去式形式。写作时按照时间的顺序将这次旅行记录下来就可以了。注意表达的流畅和连贯。
【亮点说明】这是一篇比较优秀的范文。在这篇短文中作者记叙了自己去年暑假和父母一起去北京旅行的事情。全文使用了正确的时态，因为记叙的是过去的事情，所以应该用一般过去时，句子中的动词应该用过去式的形式，还注意到了一些不规则的变化。文章按照时间的顺序将这三天作者在北京参观的地方和做的事情记叙下来，比较有条理。短文中的较好的句式有Although we were very tired, we were very happy、There were many people there、We also learned much about our country等。