Question

在每个人的成长过程中，都或多或少有一些变化，请以How I’ve Changed! 为题写一段话，介绍一下你的过去与现在的不同。（80~100词）

How I’ve changed!

Answer 1

How I've changed!

My life changed a lot in the last few years，I used to be short and have long hair ,but now I am tall and have short hair ,I used to be quiet and shy ,now I am very outgoing .I used to be afraid of dark ,now I am not .I used to be heavy ,now I am thin and healthy .

My daily life is different and I used to like different thing when I was a child.For example,I didn't use to like tests.Now,I don't mind them.I used to hate gym class.Now it's my favorite class. I used to walk to school. Now, I take the bus .when I was young, I used to have so much time to play with my friends ,but now I am really too busy ,I have to get up early and stay in school all day ,then I go right home and eat dinner.at night, I used to watch TV with my parent or chat with my grandmother , but now I can't . I love sports ,but now, I hardly ever have time to play sport. I have to do lots of homework . I really miss the old days！

【解析】

试题分析：根据所给材料可知这是一篇命题作文，介绍自己的变化。动笔前首先根据主题组织材料，确定写作内容。写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一人称，一般现在时态进行叙述。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】这篇短文包含了所有要点，能围绕内容要点适当发挥，内容具体、丰富。应用了较丰富的语言结构和词汇，用词准确、句子通顺、行文连贯、表达清楚，具有较强的语言运用能力。层次清晰，语言地道，主题鲜明，内容翔实，格式正确，结构紧凑。使用了一些比较好的字句。比如：used to，过去常常做某事；be afraid of，害怕；get up等。学习中注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用, 让文章更出彩。