Question

3．最近媒体对"中国式过马路"这一现象进行了尖锐的批评．请你以一个中学生的角色，写一篇短文，对"中国式过马路"这一现象加以评论．

现象	很多人过马路时不看红绿灯
原因	缺乏交通安全意识 匆忙赶时间
措施	遵守交通规则 你自己的建议…

注意：1．文中不能出现自己的姓名和学校名称．
      2．开头已给出，不计入总词数．字数：80词左右，不可逐字翻译．
   3．参考词语：红绿灯traffic lights，缺乏安全意识 lack awarenessof traffic safety  遵守交通规则 obey the traffic rules 
Chinese Style of Crossing Streets 
Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the internet recently．
．Now many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights．Why？I think there are two main reasons．Some people lack awareness of traffic safety．Besides，some people are so busy that they don't want to wait for the green light．
However，it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others．So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents． For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished．
As middle school students，we should obey the traffic rules．What's more，I will try my best to advise people to obey the rules．Only in this way can we cross streets safely．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是对"中国式过马路"这一现象加以评论．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称辅以第三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．现象：很多人过马路时不看红绿灯
2．原因：（1）缺乏交通安全意识；（2）匆忙赶时间
3．措施：（1）遵守交通规则；（2）你自己的建议…
常用到的重点短语：
lack of 缺乏…
besides另外
so…that如此…以至于
wait for等待
break rules违反规则
what's more 再者
try one's best to  do sth竭尽全力做某事
advise sb to do sth建议某人做某事
高分句型：
1．①For example，②whoever breaks the traffic rules ③should be punished．
①for example，引出事例，常放句首，逗号隔开．
②whoever引导的主语从句，含义无论是谁．
③情态动词的被动语态，主语whoever breaks the traffic rules是动词punish的承受者，构成被动关系，故用被动语态．
2．Only in this way can we cross streets safely．
这是一个倒装句，only+状语（副词、介词短语、从句等）"放在句首时，句子要用倒装语序，这里是主谓倒装．再例如：Only when he is selfless can a man be fearless．只有无私，才能无畏．

解答 Chinese Style of Crossing Streets 
Chinese style of crossing streets has beena hot topic on the internet recently．（点题，引出下文）
Now many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights．（现象）Why？I think there are two main reasons．Some people lack awareness of traffic safety．（缺乏交通安全意识）Besides，some people are so busy that they don't want to wait for the green light．（匆忙赶时间）
  However，it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others．So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents． For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished．（高分句型）
As middle school students，we should obey the traffic rules．（遵守交通规则）What's more，Iwill try my best to advise people to obey the rules．Only in this way can we cross streets safely．（自己的建议）．（高分句型）

点评 本题是一篇图表作文，图表作为书面表达的一种信息提示方式，比提纲作文线索显得更简洁明了，写作时也容易区分表达，本题在写作时，要特别注意几种情况的描述，不能逐句翻译，同时要根据提示有效灵活的构思，恰当使用逻辑词语，让文章显得有条理，不杂乱．