Question

你觉得校园生活安全吗？请你写一篇题为How to Keep Safe in School 的短文，谈谈你的看法。（15分）

内容包括：

描述一件发生在你身上或你看到的发生在校园的意外事件（经过与结果）。

提出解决这种校园意外事件的建议（至少两条）。

呼吁每个学生要注意校园安全。

作文要求：

不能照抄原文，不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生真实的姓名。如需使用学校名称或学生姓名，请一律用Hilltop School 和Tom.

语句连贯，词数80左右。作文的开头已经给出，不计入总词数。

How to Keep Safe in School

Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough?

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

How to keep safe in school

Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough? For example, one day, two students ran after each other in the hallway. Suddenly, one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor. Therefore, he had to stay in hospital for two weeks.

So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways. And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running.

At last, I hope all the students should pay more attention to their safety in school.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文。本文所给材料比较详细，我们要做的就是用正确的英语把这些内容表达出来。动笔前要认真阅读材料，不可遗漏要点，并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文要用到一般过去时，注意时态与时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。提建议可以使用情态动词should等。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】本文观点分明，论证了学校安全的必要性。短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少.如: because of因为，由于；pay attention to注意；And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running. 和老师最好课后留意学生，阻止他们跑。学习中注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理.

考点：提纲作文。