Question

【题目】书面表达（计15分）

根据下面表格的内容的提示，以 “Changes in my hometown” 为题，用英语写一篇80字左右的短文。

	过去	现在
环境	道路脏，狭小，到处是垃圾 有大块的空地	道路宽阔干净、路边绿树成荫 有商店和高楼大厦
生活	低矮的房子 收音机、电视	新公寓 电脑、手机、私家车
你的观点	……（至少写一句话）

Changes in my hometown

Great changes

Answer 1

【答案】

Changes in my hometown

Great changes have taken place in my hometown during the past few years. In the past, the roads used to be very dirty and narrow. What’s more, there was rubbish everywhere! People lived in low houses. Life was so boring for them that they could only listen to the radio or watch TV for fun. There were also many open spaces in the village.

But now, the dirty narrow roads have turned into wide clean ones, with green trees, modern shops and tall buildings on both sides of them. People here have moved into new flats. More and more people have bought their own computers, mobiles and even private cars!

I feel satisfied with life in my hometown. I will work hard to make it more beautiful in the future.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以Changes in my hometown为题，讲一讲自己家乡发生的变化。题目中给出了一张表格，里面有一些提示的内容，这些内容中对比了家乡过去和现在的样子，从中我们可以看出家乡发生了巨大的变化，我们需要用正确的英语将这些内容表达出来，要符合英语的表达规范。通过分析审题可知，这篇短文我们在写作的时候要特别注意将过去跟现在的不同表达清楚，如果像表格中那样，一项一项的对比，会显得比较啰嗦。因此我们可以写成两段，第一段来描述家乡过去的样子，第二段来描述家乡现在的样子，这样我们就可以清楚的看到这些变化，而且文章的条理也很清楚。写作的时候，要注意使用正确的时态和人称，还需要多使用积累的好的句型和短语，增强文章的表现力。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文，短文中作者按照表格中的提示，给我们介绍了家乡发生的变化。这篇作文主要有三个优点：一是内容完整，有条理。这篇短文共分成三段，第一段讲述了家乡过去的样子；第二段描写了家乡现在的样子，从中我们可以看到，家乡有了很大的变化；第三段作者发表了自己的感想。第二个优点是使用了正确的时态和人称。在第一段中，因为说的是家乡过去的样子，因此这一段都使用了一般过去时，动词的形式都非常准确；第二段和第三段使用了现在时态。第三个优点是短文中作者使用了比较多的好的短语和句型，如Great changes have taken place in my hometown during the past few years、Life was so boring for them that they could only listen to the radio or watch TV for fun.、the dirty narrow roads have turned into wide clean ones, with green trees, modern shops and tall buildings on both sides of them.、I will work hard to make it more beautiful in the future等。