Question

假如你是Tom,你的美国笔友Tony给你来信说准备来合肥来玩，请你告诉他一些相关的情况。不少于70字。

合肥是个美丽的城市，有700万人口，有很多名胜古迹（places of interest.）

合肥冬天很冷，夏天很热，最好春天或秋天来合肥。

可以从美国乘飞机到北京，再乘火车到合肥，因为乘火车最舒服。

Dear Tony,

I am happy to know that you will come to Hefei.Here is some information about Hefei.

Hefei is a very beautiful city.. It has a population of 7 million.It also have a lot of places of interest.The weather in Hefei is very cold in winter ,and in summer it becomes hot .So ,if you comes to Hefei ,you’d better come here in spring or winter.You can have a wonderful time here .You can fly to Beijing from American ,then you can take trains to Hefei.Because taking trains is the most comfortable.

 

 

 

I hope this helps.

Yours,

Tom

 

Answer 1

Hefei is a very beautiful city.. It has a population of 7 million.It also have a lot of places of interest.The weather in Hefei is very cold in winter ,and in summer it becomes hot .So ,if you comes to Hefei ,you’d better come here in spring or winter.You can have a wonderful time here .You can fly to Beijing from American ,then you can take trains to Hefei.Because taking trains is the most comfortable.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文，作文题目已经给出，而且列出了三条要求。写作文时要仔细审题，每一条都要写到，注意前后句的连接，不要遗漏要点，必要时可适当发挥。本文时态主要是一般现在时态，主语是第一人称，注意时态语时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】文章主要写介绍合肥，要点全部都写出，并且增加了一些内容使文章更通顺，更符合要求。文中使用很多短语，让文章更加出彩，如a population of，if you comes to Hefei，you’d better , fly to Beijing，taking trains”等。在平时的学习中，要注意点滴积累，这样在写作文时才能灵活运用。

考点：提纲作文。