Question

8．足够的睡眠时间对学生来讲很重要，然而调查显示，许多学生睡眠不足．请根据图示内容，简要指出学生睡眠不足的原因并提出建议．
要求：
1．要点齐全，并适当发挥：
2．词数：80词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
3．文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称．
It’s important for students to have enough sleeping time．However，many of them don’t have enough time to sleep．
There are different reasons for it．Some students often spend too much time on computer
games so that they don’t go to bed early．Some students have bad sleeping habits．They
often drink too much tea or coffee before going to bed．This makes them too excited to fall
asleep．
In order to get enough sleep，we should keep away from computer games．We shouldn’t
stay up too late．What’s more，we can drink hot milk instead of coffee or listen to soft music
before we go to bed，which can help us have a sound sleep．
In a word，if we make good use of time and form good habits，we’ll have enough sleeping time．Then we’ll be happier and healthier．．

Answer 1

分析 提纲式作文在写作前一定要注意审题，先确定出写作要点及重点．这篇文章的写作要点就是针对许多学生睡眠不足的情况简要指出学生睡眠不足的原因并提出建议，这也是本文的写作重点．在指出睡眠不足的原因时要用一般现在时；主语为第三人称；最后提出建议的句子可以使用一些提建议的句型，比如利用一些情态动词去表达；作总结时可以使用一般将来时，以上内容可使用第一人称we．行文中要注意要点清晰，层次分明，过度自然，语义连贯．
重要短语和句型：
spend…on…在…上花费时间；
too…to…太…以至于不能…；
in order to为了；
keep away from远离；
stay up熬夜；
What’s more而且；
instead of代替，而不是；
In a word总之；
What’s more，we can drink hot milk instead of coffee or listen to soft music  before we go to bed，which can help us have a sound sleep．并且，我们可以喝热牛奶，而不是咖啡或着是听柔和的音乐，在我们睡觉前，这可以帮助我们有一个健康的睡眠．
Some students often spend too much time on computer games so that they don’t go to bed early．一些学生经常在电脑游戏上花太多时间，这样他们才不会早早上床睡觉．

解答 It's important for students to have enough sleeping time．However，many of them don’t
have enough time to sleep．【引出话题】
    There are different reasons for it．Some students often spend too much time on
computer games so that they don’t go to bed early．Some students have bad sleeping habits．They often drink too much tea or coffee before going to bed．This makes them too excited to fall asleep．【分析原因】
    In order to get enough sleep，we should keep away from computer games．We shouldn’t stay up too late．What’s more，we can drink hot milk instead of coffee or listen to soft music  before we go to bed，which can help us have a sound sleep．【提出建议】
   In a word，if we make good use of time and form good habits，we’ll have enough sleepig time．Then we’ll be happier and healthier．【总结全文，发出号召】

点评 本篇是一篇以提纲提供情景的作文．写作的关键是要抓住文章的中心内容来写，把学生睡眠不足的原因写清楚并提出建议．写作时，要先确定好时态，再注意谓语动词形式的变化．另外，还需要使用一些句型和短语，使整篇短文意思连贯，表达流畅．避免出现一些词汇及语法上的错误．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．