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7．假如上周一你班举行了"爱护水、节约水"的主题活动，请你根据以下要点为你校校报写一篇活动报道．

活动内容	邀请王老师作报告；全班讨论如何节水和爱护水．
活动收获	我们知道我国一些地方水源受到污染；我市虽有一些河流和湖泊，但也缺水．所以…（节水和爱护水的方法至少各发挥一点）．
活动感受	…

要求：1．词数不少于90，文章的开头已为你写好，不计人总词数；
2．要点完整、层次清晰、语法正确、上下文连贯；
3．文中不得使用真实的人名、校名．
Last Monday we held an activityabout saving and protecting water．
Mr Wang was invited to give us a talk．After his speech，we had a discussion about how to save and protect water．
Now we know that some of the rivers are polluted in our country and that we are short of water although there are some rivers and lakes in our city．As a result，we need to protect and save water．For example，we shouldn't leave water running after using it．Besides，we mustn't throw rubbish into the rivers．
After taking part in the activity，we had a better understanding of the importance of protecting the environment and saving water．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇图表与提纲结合的作文，要求是假如上周一你班举行了"爱护水、节约水"的主题活动，请你根据以下要点为你校校报写一篇活动报道，也就是说体裁是新闻报道，写作内容要包括：1．活动内容．2．活动收获，其中在节水和爱护水的方法至少各发挥一点．3．活动感受，这一部分要求自我发挥，要写完整．介绍活动内容时，要用第三人称Mr Wang来写，时态用一般过去时；活动收获及感受时，用第一人称we来写，用一般现在时．

解答 Last Monday our class held an activity about saving and protecting water．
  Mr Wang was invited to give us a talk．After his speech，we had a discussion about how to save and protect water．
  Now we know that some of the rivers are polluted in our country and that we are short of water although there are some rivers and lakes in our city．As a result，we need to protect and save water．For example，we shouldn't leave water running after using it．Besides，we mustn't throw rubbish into the rivers．
  After taking part in the activity，we had a better understanding of the importance of protecting the environment and saving
water．

点评 这是一篇给材料作文，短文的开头已经给出，本作文中给出的要点比较简略，其中需要自己发挥的地方较多，可用到We shouldn't leave water running after using it．We mustn't throw rubbish into the rivers．等句式．写作时注意准确运用时态，当介绍活动内容时，时态用一般过去时；介绍活动收获及感受时，用一般现在时．为保证上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，可以使用After his speech，As a result，After taking part in the activity，等短语，让文章更有层次．