Question

10．英语课上，你们开展了一次以"What can we do to make home a happier place？"为主题的讨论，同学们把自己的想法写在卡片上．请结合卡片信息，用英语写一篇短文，向校刊Englihsh Learning投稿．

注意：（1）短文必须包括卡片所给的信息，适当发挥，并谈谈自己的想法．
（2）文中不得出现与你身份相关的信息．
（3）词数：80～100．短文首句仅供选择使用，不计入总词数．
短文首句：Recently，we've had a discussion about what we can do to make home a happier place in our English class．
Recently，we'vehadadiscussionaboutwhatwecandotomakehomeahappierplaceinourEnglishclass． We shared different ideas．
Some say it's better to spend more time with family．The more we get together，the better we understand each other．Family members should share happiness and worries．For example，when they have problems，we can do something to cheer them up．Others believe it's important to give small presents to our family on their birthdays．
I think，showing love for family is necessary．If we help with housework，they may feel warmer．Sometimes，even the smallest thing like walking with family makes them happier．Though we're young，we can do much to make a happier home．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图画作文．内容是汇报以"What can we do to make home a happier place？"为主题的讨论结果，并发表自己的观点．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．同学们的看法：更多的和家人一起，分享快乐忧愁，记得家人的生日
2．我的看法
常用到的重点短语：
the+比较级，the+比较级 越…就越…
cheer up 使兴奋
help with sth 帮助做某事
make sb+adj让某人怎样
【高分句型】
1．The more we get together，the better we understand each other．
the+比较级，the+比较级 越…就越…
2．If we help with housework，they may feel warmer．
if引导的条件状语从句，主句含有情态动词may，从句用一般现在时．
3．①Though we're young，we can do much②to make a happier home．
①though虽然，引导的让步状语从句．
②动词不定式做目的状语．

解答 Recently，we've had a discussion about what we can do to make home a happier place in our English class． We shared different ideas．
   Some say it's better to spend more time with family．The more we get together，the better we understand each other．【高分句型】Family members should share happiness and worries．For example，when they have problems，we can do something to cheer them up．Others believe it's important to give small presents to our family on their birthdays．（同学们的看法：更多的和家人一起，分享快乐忧愁，记得家人的生日）
   I think，showing love for family is necessary．If we help with housework，they may feel warmer．【高分句型】Sometimes，even the smallest thing like walking with family makes them happier．Though we're young，we can do much to make a happier home．【高分句型】（我的看法）

点评 1．确定主题--根据给出的主题进行作文．
 2．确定写作顺序--分三段，以总分总结构进行．
  3．确定每段内容：第一段，总起，介绍背景，使用给出的首句即可；第二段，根据给出的信息进行组织，并加上自己的内容；第三段，总结全文．