Question

【题目】书面表达。（10分）

假如你叫小明，你在生活、学习中遇到了一些烦恼和问题，请根据以下英文提示写一封e-mail向你曾经的外籍教师Allen征求建议。（15分）

注意：1.邮件的首句已给出。 2.可根据提示适当发挥。 3.字数80左右,不包含已给出的句子.

提示:1. Always have to study. 2. Go to different classes at weekends.

3. Too much homework. –No free time –Feel stressed.

4.Can’t communicate with parents.

Dear Allen,

I have some problems, I really need your help.

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Allen,

I have some problems. I really need your help. Now I’m in the Junior 3, the last year of my Junior School. So it is important for me to study well. I must go to different classes at weekends. On Saturday, I will go to the English class. On Sunday, I must go to the art and music class. What’s more, I have much homework every day. I spend 2 hours every day to finish my homework. I have no free time and I feel stressed. And I can’t communicate with my parents because I have no time to tell them my problems. I want to go to a senior high school, but I don’t know what to do with my time and study. Can you give me some advice?

Yours,

Xiaoming

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以小明的身份，将自己学习和生活中遇到的问题和烦恼，告诉Allen老师，向他征求建议。题目中给出了我们写作的提纲，小明的问题有学习任务重，总是要学习，周末也要去上不同的课程，作业非常多，不能和父母交流等。我们需要用正确的英语将这些内容表达出来。教材中我们接触过类似这样的短文，把自己生活中的烦恼，写信告诉某人。这样的短文我们应主要使用一般现在时态，第一人称形式。问题比较多，写作时，要注意将这些问题阐述清楚，还要注意他们之间的连接，使用一些短语或连词，如also, what’s more, and 等，这里可以使短文整体比较连贯。另外，短文中有些内容是可以自己发挥的，要注意发挥的内容贴合文章整体的需要。

【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的范文，短文中作者按照题目要求，以小明的身份，把自己生活、学习中的问题表达出来，向Allen征求建议。这篇短文主要有两个优点，一是内容完整，表达清楚。作者按照题目的要求，把小明的问题一一叙述了出来，使用了正确的句型和词汇；而是结尾处比较符合这封信的目的，用问句结束，向老师征求建议。短文中作者使用了不同的短语、句型，使文章表达有层次，意思连贯。文中较好的句型有Now I’m in the Junior 3, the last year of my Junior School. So it is important for me to study well.、What’s more, I have much homework every day.、I have no free time and I feel stressed、And I can’t communicate with my parents because I have no time to tell them my problems等。