Question

11．根据要求完成小作文，词数：30-40词左右．
在你的成长过程中，家人和老师倾注了大量的心血．他们对你的生活和学习除了给予关心，帮助之外，也会给你提出一些建议．请你根据自己的情况，列举他们给你的关心，帮助和建议．My parents are very kind and helpful．They cook meals and wash clothes for me every day． At the weekend，they often prepare some of my favorite food．Sometimes they also help me with my lessons．They are very strict with me．but when I make a mistake，they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of complaining about it．They always try to understand me．I think it is a good way for a child to grow up．With their care，I am living and studying happily．．

Answer 1

分析 动笔前应先认真阅读材料，围绕所给材料组织内容，确定主要短语，句式等问题．题中包含了这些要点：①家人和老师你的生活和学习的关心；②给你的帮助和建议．注意不要遗漏要点，句子要通顺连贯，没有语法错误．
高分句型一
they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of  complaining about it他们先听我说，然后跟我谈，而不是抱怨．instead of  而不是，注意后面应该用动名词．
高分句型二
I think it  is a good way for a child to grow up我认为这是孩子成长的好方法．这是一个宾语从句，I think是主句，it  is a good way for a child to grow up是从句．

解答 My parents are very kind and helpful．They cook meals and wash clothes for me every day． At the weekend，they often prepare some of my favorite food．【要点一，家人对你的生活和学习的关心】Sometimes they also help me with my lessons．They are very strict with me．but when I make a mistake，they first listen to me and then have a talk with me instead of  complaining about it【高分句型一，注意 instead of  的使用】．They always try to understand me．I think it  is a good way for a child to grow up【高分句型二，注意 宾语从句的使用】．With their care，I am living and studying happily．【要点二，给你的帮助和建议】

点评 本篇写作需注意要求中所提供的要点，不可遗漏．需在平时积累相关的词汇，多阅读此类题材，将词汇归类整理；动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲，写出关键单词．写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系．