Question

【题目】Directions:Write an English composition in over 120 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.请描述图片内容并谈谈你的感受。

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Answer 1

【答案】One possible version：

As you can see, there are two figures in the picture given above. One is a fat woman who is working out, maybe trying to lose weight. The other is a tiny student carrying a big schoolbag which looks heavy and the student is saying to the woman: “If you carry the schoolbag for me, I’m sure you’ll lose weight.”

Probably the picture makes many people laugh, but as a student, I feel bad. Because this is what we experience everyday. I mean we students have too much homework to do and too many things to carry. It seems that heavy tasks have brought tremendous pressure to both our mind and body. Representing all the students, I sincerely hope the burden of learning can be reduced and then we shall fly like a bird.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于议论文，要求学生描述所给图片内容并抒发自己的感想。

第一步：立意

体裁：议论文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。

主题：学生的课业负担过重，应适当减负。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1.描述图片内容（people in the picture and their activities）

2.表达感想

1）对照自己的经历和体会。（experience like this）

2）对这一现象的看法和感受。（feeling about it）

3) 提出建议或倡议来解决问题。（solution to solve the problem）

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

work out; lose weight; carry; too much; be stressed out; reduce; be sure about; burst into laughter; relieve pressure.

第三步：连词成句

1. A fat woman is working out to lose weight.

2. A thin student is carrying a large schoolbag and it looks heavy.

3. Students have too much homework and their school bags are always heavy.

4. Under much pressure, we feel stressed out.

5. We feel exhausted from body to soul.

6. We hope school and teacher can relieve some pressure on us.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改