Question

假如你是红星中学的李华，收到来自英国学生Mark的电子邮件，咨询你校暑期为异国学生举办汉语夏令营活动，请通过电子邮件向Mark介绍本次活动，其内容如下：
1. 活动时间：7月10日到7月30日；地点: 红星中学。
2. 活动内容：
·学习日常汉语，可与当地人交流。
·举办各种晚会，了解中国历史和中国传统文化，例如节日……
· 参观博物馆，长城等……
3. 活动意义……
注意：
1. 词数不少于100；
2. 可适当的加入细节，以使内容充实，行文连贯；
3. 开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Mark,
I feel delighted to get your email,___________________________________________
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Yours ,Lihua

Answer 1

Dear Mark,
I feel delighted to get your email, knowing you are so interested in the Chinese Summer Camp to be held in our school from July 10th to July 30th this summer. The content of this Chinese Summer Camp is as follows:
Firstly you will learn everyday Chinese by communicating with Chinese students so that you can speak simple Chinese with local people. At the same time you will be taught Chinese  with the help of teachers ,understanding the meaning of Chinese characters.
Secondly you will take part in different parties, knowing the history of China and Chinese culture , especially Chinese holidays, which will impress you deeply.
What’s more, you will have chances to visit some museums and tour the Great Wall, experiencing the colorful culture of China and the greatness of the Great Wall.
I believe the Chinese Summer Camp will not only provide the chance for you to study Chinese , but also will promote friendship between us.

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类书面表达，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但是不是很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏。除了表达这些要点以外，还要适当拓展，使内容充实，这就要求考生自己拓展发挥，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，运用了好的词组和句子：as follows 如下，with the help of 在…的帮助下，not only… but also …不但，而且， I feel delighted to get your email, knowing you are so interested in the Chinese Summer Camp to be held in our school from July 10th to July 30th this summer. 这用了现在分词做状语， you will learn everyday Chinese by communicating with Chinese students so that you can speak simple Chinese with local people. 这句话用了结果状语从句， you will take part in different parties, knowing the history of China and Chinese culture , especially Chinese holidays, which will impress you deeply.这句话用了非限制性定语从句， you will have chances to visit some museums and tour the Great Wall, experiencing the colorful culture of China and the greatness of the Great Wall.这句话也用了现在分词，还有范文还使用了Firstly，Secondly，What’s more,这样的关联词，使文章更加连贯。