Question

【题目】假设你是红星中学高二(1)班的学生李华，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，用英语写一篇日记，记述你周日在小区里扫雪的过程。词数不少于60。

Sunday, January 12 Snowy

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Answer 1

【答案】Sunday, January12 Snowy

This morning, when I looked out of the window, I excitedly found it was snowing heavily. Attracted by the beautiful sight, I couldn’t wait to go outside with my camera. As I was walking on the path in front of our building, I saw a boy suddenly slip on the snow-covered ground. I walked up and helped him out. Luckily, he was not injured. It was at that moment that I realized what I should do. Immediately, I ran back home to get a broom and started to sweep the path. I worked so hard that I sweated a lot. An hour later, the thick snow was cleared away. Looking at the clean path, my neighbors all smiled and gave me thumbs up.

I felt very happy that I did something for my neighborhood.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写一篇日记。按照四幅图的先后顺序，记述周日在小区里扫雪的过程。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

人称：第一人称

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时。

要求：

1. 发现下雪

2.看见有人摔倒

3.扫雪的过程

4.描述自己的心情

第二步：列提纲 （重点词组）

look out of；couldn’t/can’t wait to do sth.；go outside；in front of；snow-covered；on the ground；walk up；at that moment；worked hard；clear away；thumbs up；start to do sth.等

第三步：连词成句

1. When I looked out of the window, I excitedly found it was snowing heavily.

2. Attracted by the beautiful sight, I couldn’t wait to go outside with my camera.

3. As I was walking on the path in front of our building, I saw a boy suddenly slip on the snow-covered ground.

4. It was at that moment that I realized what I should do.

5. Immediately, I ran back home to get a broom and started to sweep the path. I worked so hard that I sweated a lot.

6. Looking at the clean path, my neighbors all smiled and gave me thumbs up.

7. I felt very happy that I did something for my neighborhood.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）：as；and；when；so…that…等

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改