Question

 请以“One Thing I’m Proud of”为题，用英语写一篇100—120个词的短文，记述一件你自己认为得意的事情。要求如下：
1. 记述事情经过；
2. 简要说明你感到得意的原因或从中得到的启示。
注意：文章的标题已给出（不计词数）。
One Thing I’m Proud of

Answer 1

One possible version：
One Thing I’m Proud of
I still remember how I became a good table tennis player.
The first day I went to high school, I saw some of my classmates playing table tennis. Amazed at how skillful they were, I was determined to be just as good. Later on, I often watched them carefully to learn their techniques. Then I kept practicing until I became confident enough to challenge the good players. At the end of the term I became one of the best players in my class.
I am really proud of this experience, because it helps me realize that we all can fulfill our potential and achieve our goals through hard work. It also helps me better understand the proverb “Practice makes perfect”.
Li Yue

试题分析：本文是提纲类作文，要求以“One Thing I’m Proud of”为题，写一篇100—120个词的短文，记述一件你自己认为得意的事情。通过审题可知此篇书面表达应写成记叙文，写自己经历的事情和得到的启发，学生们对此都会有话可说，只要做适当的发挥即可。因为是记叙自己的经历，所以文章要使用一般过去时，在写作的过程中，要力求语言简练，而且为了文章内容上的衔接和层次的清晰，要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来条理性更强。同时还要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，以提高文章的档次。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，语言简练流畅，时态、人称和标点符号使用正确，很好的完成了写作任务。在作文中作者开门见山提出自己想要写的事情，然后详细记叙当时的情况。最后表明了自己对这件事的认识和想法。在文中作者使用的Later on, Then，At the end of等词汇清楚地表明了事情的发展过程，给人一种脉络清晰的感觉。此外文中高级词汇和短语fulfill our potential，achieve our goals和谚语“Practice makes perfect”.的使用都成为了文章的亮点所在。