Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
One day, while she was walking in the woods, a girl found two starving songbirds. She took them home and put them in a small cage. She cared them with love and the birds grew strong. Every morning they greeted her with a wonderful song. The girl felt great love for the birds.
One day the girl left the door to the cage open. The larger and stronger of the two birds flew from the cage. The girl was so frightened that he would fly away. As he flew close, she grasped him wildly. Her heart felt glad at her success in capturing him. Suddenly she felt the bird go limp. She opened her hand and stared in horror at the dead bird. Her desperate love had killed him.
　She noticed the other bird moving back and forth on the edge of the cage. She could feel his great need for freedom. He needed to soar into the clear, blue sky. She lifted him from the cage and tossed him softly into the air. The bird circled once, twice, three times.
　　The girl watched delightedly at the bird's enjoyment. Her heart was no longer concerned with her loss. She wanted the bird to be happy. Suddenly the bird flew closer and landed softly on her shoulder. It sang the sweetest melody that she had ever heard.
　　She finally realized that the fastest way to lose love is to hold on it too tight, the best way to keep love is to give it WINGS!
[写作内容]
1. 以约30个词概括短文的要点；
2. 然后以约120个词就 “爱就要放手” 这一主题发表看法，并包括如下要点：
a) 以自己为例，简述生活中你父母对你的过度关注；
b) 你父母的做法对你造成了什么不良的影响；
c) 如果有机会，你会就此问题对父母说些什么
[写作要求]
1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准]
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

Answer 1

A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly when she accidentally killed a bird which tried to escape and freed the other which flew happily.
I must admit that my parents love me very much, but their excessive love sometimes has gone too far. For example, they won’t allow me to chat with my American friend online or allow me to go shopping by myself for fear I might be cheated though I am already 18 years old. What’s worse, they even secretly read my diary.
To be honest, I am now suffering a lot from this. Due to their excessive love, I don’t have many friends. As a girl of 18, I am not able to make my own decisions about many things. Though I can’t tolerate all this, I dare not speak up for I know this is all due to their deep love for me.
If I had the chance to talk with them about this, I would like to tell them that I can manage without their hovering over me! I’d like to say to them, “Please let go of your anxiety. Give me some advice just when necessary, and for most of the time, let me think for myself. Your love should never be a burden on me. Love me, and let me fly with it.”  

试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】文章简洁的总结了所给材料，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯，使用了词组：What’s worse更糟糕的是, Due to 由于，因为，To be honest说实话, let go of 放手，句式上也是富有变化：A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly when she accidentally killed a bird which tried to escape and freed the other which flew happily.这句话用了定语从句和不定式做表语， For example, they won’t allow me to chat with my American friend online or allow me to go shopping by myself for fear I might be cheated though I am already 18 years old. 这句话用了目的状语从句，Give me some advice just when necessary, and for most of the time, let me think for myself. 这句话用了省略句，