Question

【题目】假设你是李华，五一节放假期间你和爸妈一起到杭州旅游。请根据图示，写一篇游记。

参考词汇：Leifeng Temple雷峰塔；preserve保护。

要求：1、适当增加细节，使文章流畅；

2、注意卷面整洁，书写工整；

3、字数为110词左右。

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Answer 1

【答案】My parents and I had a great trip to Hangzhou during the Labor Day holiday, which was full of surprises.

Our first delight on our first day was going to the West Lake. The lake was clear, reflecting the sky like an amazingly drawn painting. In the far distance stood the Leifeng Temple, which had remained standing for hundreds of years. Then followed a tour of China National Tea Museum, where we learned the history of tea making.

The second day, we drove to Xixi Wetland Park. What surprised us most was that people are doing a great deal to preserve the wetland. There, we saw lots of birds and plants that couldn’t be found anywhere else. The park was so big that at one time we thought we were lost. The day ended wonderfully.

All in all, the trip was fun and even educational. We all enjoyed it.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于记叙文，要求写一篇游记。

第一步：审题

体裁：记叙文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。

结构：总分总法，分为四段：第一段引出描写五一假期旅游；第二段描写西湖和博物馆；第三段描写西溪鸟类湿地；第四段描写感想并总结。

要求： 1、适当增加细节，使文章流畅；2、注意卷面整洁，书写工整；3、字数为110词左右。

第二步：列提纲 （重点词组）

the Labor Day holiday；be full of；delight；be going to；the West Lake；drawn painting；the Leifeng Temple；hundreds of；China National Tea Museum；Xixi Wetland Park；a great deal；so… that…；all in all等。

第三步：连词成句

1. My parents and I had a great trip to Hangzhou during the Labor Day holiday, which was full of surprises.

2. The lake was clear, reflecting the sky like an amazingly drawn painting.

3. In the far distance stood the Leifeng Temple, which had remained standing for hundreds of years.

4. Then followed a tour of China National Tea Museum, where we learned the history of tea making.

5. What surprised us most was that people are doing a great deal to preserve the wetland.等。

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

本文用了and；Then；All in all等关联词。

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改