Question

就"现代师生关系"这个主题发表你的看法,并包括如下点:
1你是否愿意告诉老师你内心的想法?为什么? 
2你希望你与你老师之间关系怎样?如何才能建立这种关系?
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Answer 1

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The relationship between a teacher and a student can be either good or bad, helpful or harmfuh. Either way, the relationship can affect the student for the rest of his life. A good teacher-student relationship will make learning enjoyable and well mutually understandable. Whereas, a hard relationship can discourage the student from learning and make teaching an unpleasant task.
In order to have a good teacher-student relationship, it is important that the teacher and the student respect each other. The teacher does not have to force the student to learn. In fact, many students will often work hard simply because they respect their teachers and want to please them. The teacher should motivate and encourage the student without forcing him.
He needs patience and understanding. Learning can be fun when the student has the right attitude towards it. As for the student,he must always show the teacher proper respect. He should be eager to learn and willing to work hard. It is also important to listen carefully and pay attention. Otherwise he would not be able to profit fully from his teacher's knowledge and assistance.
In conclusion, a good teacher-student relationship can be mutually heneficiah The student gains knowledge eagerly and enjoyably, and the teacher gains satisfaction from his job.

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