Question

前不久，中央电视台报道了贵州十岁男孩独自照顾重病妈妈的故事，引起社会极大反响。假如你是某校高三学生李华，请根据以下要点用英语向某英语报社写一封信。1、呼吁社会爱心捐助；2、学会感恩；3、结合实际谈谈你的看法。注意：1、信的开头和结尾已给出，不记入总词数；2、可根据内容要点适当发挥；词数120个左右。
Dear editor ,
I’m a  student of Senior Three . Not long ago , from CCTV, I learned that a ten-year-old boy in Guizhou was taking care of his seriously sick mother in hospital alone , by which I was deeply moved ….
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Yours sincerely ,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear editor ,
I’m a  student of Senior Three . Not long ago , from CCTV, I learned that a ten-year-old boy in Guizhou was taking care of his seriously sick mother in hospital alone , by which I was deeply moved ….
China is a great country and Chinese people think highly of traditional virtues. It is what the child did for his mother that sets us students a good example. First, something should be done for the little boy and his family. We appeal to the whole society to donate money or do something else to help them out of the difficulty. Second, our schools should help to develop the spirit of being grateful to the society,  teachers as well as parents. Last but not least, our government should contitue,  To improve the medical insurance system, especially to support those who are badly in need of medical care.
As students, not only should we work hard at our lessons, but we should be helpful, bear gratitude in mind and overcome difficulties bravely and wisely.
Yours sincerely ,
Li Hua

试题分析：本文是书信类作文，要求就贵州十岁男孩独自照顾重病妈妈的故事用英语向某英语报社写一封信。文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但不是很具体，考生要把要点包括进去，不能有遗漏。而且要发挥自己的想象，充实内容，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，应用了一些较好的词组和句子： think highly of 高度评价，in need of需要，bear sth. in mind记住， It is what the child did for his mother that sets us students a good example. 这句话用了主语从句和强调句， appeal to sb. to do sth呼吁某人做..，as well as 不但…而且， To improve the medical insurance system, especially to support those who are badly in need of medical care.这句话用了定语从句， not only should we work hard at our lessons, but we should be helpful, bear gratitude in mind and overcome difficulties bravely and wisely.这句话用了倒装句，还有文章使用了 First, Second, Last but not least这样的关联词使文章更连贯。