Question

2014年春晚上, 一曲《时间都去哪儿了》戳中所有人泪点。伴随我们成长，父母在不经意间老去, 全社会都沉浸在对父母的感恩中, 你也颇有感触, 请以此为主题, 写一篇感想。
附歌词: ……记忆中的小脚丫，肉嘟嘟的小嘴巴，一生把爱交给他，只为那一声爸妈;时间都去哪儿了,还没好好感受年轻就老了, 生儿养女一辈子，满脑子都是孩子哭了笑了;时间都去哪儿了，还没好好看看你眼睛就花了，柴米油盐半辈子, 转眼就只剩下满脸的皱纹了……
要求:
1. 歌词仅供參考，请勿逐句翻译。
2. 文中应包括对父母付出的回忆, 和对如何感恩父母的反思。可以适当增加细节加以发挥。
3. 词数120左右。文章开头已给，不计入总词数。参考词汇： 皱纹 wrinkle
The audiences were all moved to tears by the song Where has the time gone in the Spring Festival Gala (春晚) of this year.
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Answer 1

The audiences were all moved to tears by the song Where has the time gone in the Spring Festival Gala(春晚) of this year. 
Every time I enjoy the song, I can’t hold back the tears in my eyes. To provide me with better educational opportunities, my parents have always been overworking without any complaints. Exhausting as his work was, my father always took me to school by bike when I was very young. I also owe my gratitude to my mother, who is always there whenever I have trouble.
It’s only when we find their grey hair and wrinkles that we realize they’re getting older. As a student, I can’t afford to buy them expensive gifts now, but I can help with their housework. What’s more , I’m determined to work harder to let them feel proud of me in the future.

试题分析：这是一篇半开放的书面表达，题目要求根据歌曲《时间都去哪儿了》写一篇感想。作文应包含对父母付出的回忆和对如何感恩父母的反思。具体内容要考生自己拓展，个人的想法和经历不同，答案也千差万别，但是考生应该注意表达观点的时候，要注意遣词造句，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。还要注意使用第一人称进行写作，注意单词拼写、标点符号、时态和语法知识的正确应用。
【亮点说明】范文使用了一些重点语法知识：时间状语从句Every time I enjoy the song, when I was very young；让步状语从句Exhausting as his work was；非限制性定语从句who is always there whenever I have trouble；强调句型It’s only when we find their grey hair and wrinkles that we realize they’re getting older.；现在完成进行时my parents have always been overworking等，显示了较强的语法基础；范文使用了一些短语：hold back, help with, feel proud of, in the future, As a student等，使文章内容充实，范文使用了较多的固定搭配和固定句型：provide me with, owe my gratitude to my mother, I can’t afford to buy them expensive gifts now, I’m determined to work harder等，遣词造句和文章结构安排得很合理；范文注意使用As a student, What’s more等来衔接上下文。