Question

假定你是中学生李华。在一位名叫TigerMom的学生家长的博客上，你看到如下内容。请你根据博客内容、写作要点和要求，给这位家长回复。

I’m the mother of a sixteen-year-old. I have a rule for my daughter：be among the top 5 students or get punished in one way or another. She has been doing very well in school，but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her. Am I wrong?

写作要点：

1．表明自己的看法；

2．陈述自己的理由(可举例说明)；

3．提出至少两条建议。

4．短文词数不少于100(不含已写好的部分)。

Hi，TigerMom，

What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China.

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Answer 1

【答案】

不唯一

Hi，TigerMom，

What_puzzles_you_is_actually_a_puzzle_for_many_parents_in_China.  In my opinion, what you think and what you do are not suitable.

Although high grades are important in assessing students and for their future university admission，development in wisdom，emotion，health，and life attitude should never be ignored. There are many examples around us. Some top  students in school have turned out not to be as successful in society as they are expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Besides，punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.

So I suggest that you take your friends’ advice. More importantly，let her live like a lovely girl；let her have more friends and social activities；and let her make mistakes of her own as the teenagers often do.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是一篇应用文，首先表明自己对这件事的看法，将对感情，健康方面的提升要点，更为重要进行阐述，再举例对所提看法的说明，写作中注意使用平时积累的“起承转合”的连词，使用万能句型造句，最后提出自己的建议。

考点：应用文中书信类文体

点评：对于应用文写作要简洁明了，直入主题，平时学习时多进行作文模板的记忆，万能句型的积累，高中作文写作，要注意 在写作之前，首先对题目进行认真的审清，并在脑海中回想自己积累的哪些句式、句型、单词能用进来，这些单词、句型都应是经典的，不会错的。

写的过程中，多注意灵活使用定语从句，包括非限制性定语从句。要熟悉英美人写文章的习惯，遇到专有地名、人名一定要用非限制性定语从句，强调唯一性。平时的英语作文就可以多尝试使用这些表达，考试时才能游刃有余，胸有成竹。