Question

假设你是本刊读者Jack，请你根据所给的背景材料给Peter写封回信。内容包括：
1．分析Peter父母不同意的理由；
2．你给Peter的具体建议: 1) 和父母好好谈谈,让他们意识到参加街舞培训班的好处。2）请培训班老师帮忙。3）向父母承诺不花费太多时间影响学习。
背景材料：
Teenagers 总228（10/2009）期
编者按：本期刊登了Peter的来信，欢迎读者就信中谈到的问题进行分析并提出建议。
Editor,
I’m a boy of 18. I like arts, especially dancing. I want to attend a hip-hop (街舞) training course on the weekend, but my parents don’t permit me to. I’m very upset and need your advice.
Peter
注意：1、词数100左右；2、文章的开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear peter,
You are very upset that your parents don’t permit you to attend a hip-hop training course on the weekend.                                                           
                                                                         
Yours,
Jack

Answer 1

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Dear Peter,
You are very upset that your parents don’t permit you to attend a hip-hop training course on the weekend. I understand your situation. Maybe your parents are worried that you will spend so much time on it that your study will be affected.
I suggest you have a good talk with your parents. You can also turn to your dance teacher for help. You should make you parents aware of the benefits of the training class. For example, the training will build up your body and make your mind relaxed. What’s more, you can communicate with more people and learn a lot about society. Of course, you must promise that you will not spend too much time on it.
I’m sure your parents will agree with you in the end.
Yours,
Jack

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点评：作文应该是紧扣文章主题，遵循特定的书信格式，选用恰当的语言合理组织文章结构，内容统一、连贯，语法、拼写、标点正确，用词恰当。为了避免太多单词拼写错误，语法错误，不要为了追求词语的华丽而堆积一些自己也没把握的单词，不要刻意追求长句而写一些自己不知对错的有多个从句组成的长句。考试时最好选择自己最有把握的词汇，短语，句式。