Question

16．1．列举游客的不文明行为（至少两点）．
2．说明不文明行为的不良影响（至少两点）；
3．对此，你的感想或建议．
注意：1．文章开头结尾已经给出，但不计入总词数；
  2．词数：120词左右；
3．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：不文明的uncivilized
Dear editor，
Nowadays，many tourists behave badly in some scenic spots．Their uncivilized behaviors are presented in the following aspects．
Some travelers are unwilling to queue up for tickets for attractions or vehicles in the scenic regions because they always want to get benefit for themselves ahead of others．Some others even pick flowers or shake the trees to see the flowers falling down on purpose．Their behaviors destroy the beauty of nature as well as their own images seriously．
As for the behaviors mentioned above，I feel very angry about it．I suggest that the government or the travel departments should take tough measures to prevent the behaviors．For example，the people should be punished due to what they have done．
                                                               Yours，
                                                               Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是提纲作文，根据所给提示关于游客的不文明行为写一篇短文．写作要点：1．列举游客的不文明行为（至少两点）；2．说明不文明行为的不良影响（至少两点）；3．对此，你的感想或建议．属提纲作文．在写作时人称以第三人称为主．时态以一般现在时为主．重要短语：behave badly （表现不好），be unwilling to （不愿意做某事），queue up（排队），on purpose（故意地），as well as（和，又，也），as for （关于），take measures to do （采取措施做），due to（由于），ahead of（在…前面）．

解答 Dear editor，
 Nowadays，many tourists behave badly in some scenic spots．Their uncivilized behaviors are presented in the following aspects．
 Some travelers are unwilling to queue up for tickets for attractions or vehicles in the scenic regions because they always want to get benefit for themselves ahead of others．【高分句型】Some others even pick flowers or shake the trees to see the flowers falling down on purpose．（游客的不文明行为）Their behaviors destroy the beauty of nature as well as their own images seriously．（不文明行为的不良影响）
 As for the behaviors mentioned above，I feel very angry about it．I suggest that the government or the travel departments should take tough measures to prevent the behaviors．【高分句型】For example，the people should be punished due to what they have done．（感想或建议）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．