Question

【题目】鲁甸8.3大地震发生之后，你的奥地利笔友Tom发来电子邮件，向你了解地震的有关情况。请你根据下列提示给Tom 回一封电子邮件。

地震发生的时间	2014-8-3
地震发生的地点	云南省鲁甸县
地震震级	里氏6.5级；14年以来云南遭受的最强、杀伤力最大的地震
地震造成的破坏	1. 造成615人死亡；3143人受伤；114人失踪。 2. 大量的房屋倒塌，数千人无家可归。 3. 山体滑坡，道路被堵，供电、供水、通信中断
各界反应	政府立即采取行动组织官兵，志愿者前去救援.

［写作内容］

1．地震发生的时间、地点；

2．地震的影响；

3. 各界反应。

生词；里氏6.5级 measure at 6.5Ms

山体滑坡hill slide 通信telecommunication

［写作要求］

只能用5个句子表达全部内容。

［评分标准］

句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

A terrible earthquake, measuring at 6.5Ms, which is believed to be the strongest and deadliest one since 14 years ago in Yunnan, struck Ludian County, Yunnan Province on August 3. It caused 615 people deaths,3143 people injured, and 114 people missing. A great number of houses and buildings were destroyed, leaving thousands of people homeless. What’s worse, there were hill slide, with roads blocked as well as water supply, electricity and telecommunication cut off. Luckily, the government took immediate action to organize a great many soldiers and volunteers to rescue the people from danger.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是篇图表材料作文, 要求学生笔友Tom回一封电子邮件，内容包括：1．地震发生的时间、地点；2．地震的影响；3. 各界反应。所以时态要以一般过去时为主。并且只能用5个句子表达全部内容。还应该注意使用较高级的词汇和句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。

【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如since 14 years ago，A great number of，thousands of people homeless, a great many，还运用了非限制性定语从句which is believed to be the strongest and deadliest one since 14 years ago in Yunnan, v-ing短语形式做伴随状语leaving thousands of people homeless.等等。并注意了句子变化和句子之间的衔接如：What’s worse, as well as，Luckily等。