Question

【题目】假设你是李华。你的两位朋友Tom与Peter几天前产生了误会。Peter的生日即将来临，Tom想送他一个礼物来缓和关系，修复友情，特地发来邮件寻求你的建议。请你根据以下要点给Tom回一封邮件：

1、礼物选择；

2、你的理由；

3、其他建议。

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Dear Tom,

I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter.

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Best wishes

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom,

I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter. If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.

As far as I know, Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body. In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship. Besides, taking a bike is an environmentally-friendly means of transport. It’s convenient for him to get around as well.

Apart from giving him a gift, you can also adopt other means, such as travelling, seeing a movie, having dinner and going shopping. No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.

Best wishes

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文属于提纲式作文。题干给出了写作背景（你的两位朋友Tom与Peter几天前产生了误会。Peter的生日即将来临，Tom想送他一个礼物来缓和关系，发来邮件寻求你的建议，给Tom回封信）以及写作要点提示（信件中给出关于礼物选择的建议，说明理由，并给出其他建议）。成文时应注意以下几点：(1)内容要点齐全，完整叙述主要内容。(2)使用正确的人称。(3)时态：一般现在时为主。(4)适当使用一些连词和插入语，使文章自然、流畅。(5)恰当使用一些高级词汇和句型，以增加文章的档次。根据题目的要求和我们上面提到的注意点，列出提纲：第一部分：建议送给Peter的生日礼物（送自行车作为礼物）；第二部分：说明送这个礼物的理由（锻炼身体，增强体质；一起外出；环保而且使用方便）；第三部分：其他建议。

【亮点说明】

本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达： 1.使用高级句型：虚拟现在的条件状语从句If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.；使用非限制性定语从句In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship.；形式主语it的使用It’s convenient for him to get around as well.；no matter what引导的让步状语从句No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important.；宾语从句的使用I really hope that we can be good friends forever.。2.使用了过渡词语：Besides等。3.使用了重要短语：as far as I know就我所知；take exercise锻炼； build up逐渐增强，增进；get around随意走动，传播，说服；apart from除此之外。