Question

【题目】假如你是新华中学的学生李华，偶然看到在你市求学的美国学生Tom在网上发帖，要大家给他推荐一本学习汉语的书。你手头正好有一本合适的书《新实用汉语》可以借给他。请你给他发一封电子邮件, 要点如下:

1. 说明写信原因；

2. 描述书的情况；

3. 约定见面时间和地点。

《新实用汉语》：New Practical Chinese

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯；

3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Tom,

My name is Li Hua, a student of Xinhua Middle School.

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Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom，

My name is Li Hua，a student of Xinhua Middle School. The other day，I learned quite by chance that you were in need of a book to help you improve your Chinese. I happen to have one and I think it might help you.

The book is entitled New Practical Chinese and it is intended for beginners at your level. It includes the basic conversations in our daily life and it is also a window through which you can get to know Chinese culture and customs .Because it is edited by three language experts，it has been popular with the readers ever since it came out two years ago.

If it is convenient to you，let’s meet at 3 pm this Sunday at the entrance to the People’s Park，and there I can give you the book face to face. If you are not free，try to find another time that is suitable for both of us.

Best wishes.

Yours，

Li Hua

升格作文

Dear Tom，

My name is Li Hua，a student of Xinhua Middle School. The other day，I learned quite by chance that you were in need of a book to help you improve your Chinese. I happen to have one，①which I think might help you.(定语从句升级句式)

The book，②entitled New Practical Chinese (过去分词作定语升级句式)，is intended for beginners at your level.③Not only does it include the basic conversations (倒装升级句式)，but it is also a window through which you can get to know Chinese culture and customs.④Edited by three language experts (过去分词作状语)，it has been popular with the readers ever since it came out two years ago.

If it is convenient to you，let’s meet at 3 pm this Sunday at the entrance to the People’s Park，⑤where I can give you the book face to face (定语从句升级句式)．⑥If not (省略句升级句式)，try to find another time that is suitable for both of us.

Yours，

Li Hua

【解析】首先审题，假如你是新华中学的学生李华，偶然看到在你市求学的美国学生Tom在网上发帖，要大家给他推荐一本学习汉语的书。你手头正好有一本合适的书《新实用汉语》可以借给他。请你给他发一封电子邮件。任务中给出的提示信息包含如下内容：1. 说明写信原因；2. 描述书的情况；3. 约定见面时间和地点。抓住了这亮点，我们就抓住了文章的核心内容。其次选用正确的人称和时态，考虑用一般现在时，第一人称来写。然后写出单个句子，使用正确的连词，连句成段。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意:提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的复合句，为文章增色不少，如定语从句I happen to have one，①which I think might help you.(定语从句升级句式) If it is convenient to you，let’s meet at 3 pm this Sunday at the entrance to the People’s Park，⑤where I can give you the book face to face (定语从句升级句式)．增加了文章的可读性。