Question

假设你是李夏I你的美国笔友Sam来信关心你参加商考的情况，请根据以下要点回信告知。
1. 考试日期与科目；
2. 考试准备情况；
3. 考试吋的状态；
4. 对试题的感受；
5. 可能的考试结果。
注意：
1.      词数120左右；
2.      开头语和结尾语已为你写好；
3.      可以适当增加细节.以使行文连贯；
4.      文中不能出现考生真实姓名和学校名称。
参考词汇：college entrance examination
Dear Sam,
Thank you for your concern.                                                           ________________________ 
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Answer 1

One possible version :
Dear Sam ,
Thank you for your concern. I am glad to tell you something about what you asked about our college entrance examination .
The college entrance examination falls on June 7and June 8 every year ,and the subjects that we should prepare for are different depending on each province .Generally speaking , we are busy reviewing and preparing for it the moment we enter senior three ,which is considered a vital period .With the exam approaching , most students will feel nervous and upset .But by now when I am sitting the exam , I feel calm ,because I think the exam is neither too easy nor too difficult . I am sure I will get a good result .But whatever the result is, I will face it calmly. After all , I have made every effort ,and I won’t regret .
Best wishes !                                 
Yours ,
Li Xia

试题分析：本篇书面表达要求写一封书信，告诉朋友关于高考的一些情况，属于应用文范畴。书信是同学们非常熟悉的一种写作体裁，而且内容也是同学们正在体验着的高考，并且开头和结尾又已经给出，所以同学们写起来应该是游刃有余。在写作时应注意的问题有以下几个方面：首先，因为内容是同学们正在经历着的关于高考的事情，所以要使用一般现在时或者现在进行时。其次，要尽量使用高级词汇和句型来提高作文档次。此外，写作时也要使用恰当的连接词以使行文连贯，层次清晰。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，语言流畅，时态、人称和标点符号的使用正确，很好的完成了写作任务。在作文中作者开门见山提出自己写信的目的，即告诉Sam有关高考的事情，这种结构安排符合书信类文体的结构安排。在句式方面作者使用了定语从句which is considered a vital period，状语从句whatever the result is, 宾语从句what you asked about our college entrance examination等，而且还用到了Generally speaking , With the exam approaching , After all ,等短语，这些短语和句式的使用有效地增加了文章的亮点，提高了作文档次。