Question

16．假定你是李华，你对伦敦一家培训机构在网上发布的暑期夏令营活动广告很感兴趣．
请给该机构写信报名．内容需包括：
（1）报名的原因
（2）询问相关情况；开始时间和时长，相关费用；
（3）你的期待
注意：100字左右．
适当增加细节以使行文连贯．
信的开头结尾已为你写好．
Dear Sir/Madam
As a student from China，I'm going to London to visit my uncle and his family for two weeks this coming winter vacation，and your ad has come to my notice．Actually，I'm interested in the activities you offer，which I feel will be a good chance to improve my spoken English．（高分句型一） That's why I'm writing to sign up for it．
Meanwhile，I would feel honored if you could give me some more details about the camp．To begin with，when it will begin，and how long the camp will last．Secondly，I'd appreciate it if you could tell me how much it will cost．（高分句型二）Actually，it's my hope that I can have my English improved and make some English friends in the camp．
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息对伦敦一家培训机构在网上发布的暑期夏令营活动广告很感兴趣，给该机构写信报名，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）报名的原因（2）询问相关情况；开始时间和时长，相关费用；（3）你的期待2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：Actually事实上；sign up报名；To begin with首先；make  friends交朋友；
 Actually，I'm interested in the activities you offer，which I feel will be a good chance to improve my spoken English．（高分句型一）
Secondly，I'd appreciate it if you could tell me how much it will cost．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam：
      As a student from China，I'm going to London to visit my uncle and his family for two weeks this coming winter vacation，and your ad has come to my notice．Actually，I'm interested in the activities you offer，which I feel will be a good chance to improve my spoken English．（高分句型一） That's why I'm writing to sign up for it．
     Meanwhile，I would feel honored if you could give me some more details about the camp．To begin with，when it will begin，and how long the camp will last．Secondly，I'd appreciate it if you could tell me how much it will cost．（高分句型二）Actually，it's my hope that I can have my English improved and make some English friends in the camp．
     Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．