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假定你是李华，在一个英文网络论坛上，你看到一个名叫Grown-up的中学生发帖(post)寻求帮助，请根据帖子的内容、写作要点和要求回帖。

Grown-up        Post at 20-05-2013  18:30                             1#

Hi, everyone,   I’m a Senior Grade Three student, and I am suffering from mental pressure these days, what should I do?  TOP

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写作要点：
1. 告诉Grown-up心理压力不可避免；      2. 告诉Grown-up心里压力的危害；
3. 建议Grown-up应正确面对心理压力；    4. 介绍你面对心里压力时所采取的措施。
注意：
1. 词数100左右。
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
3. 文章的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Answer 1

Hi,Grown-up:
It’s a fact that we face more and more mental pressure in our life. In my opinion, everyone will meet some mental pressure in their life. But if it lasts along time, it may do harm to our body.
Whenever I meet pressure, I try to keep calm and think how to overcome it, sometimes it is very effective. When I’m stressed out, I listen to music or do some sports. After that, I often find that my moods become much better. If I can’t overcome it, I will turn to my parents, teachers or good friends.
To sum up, we should face pressure bravely and overcome it actively.
Hope my ideas work.

试题分析：本题为材料作文，在写作之前要注意审题，一是要写到哪些方面的内容，就本作文来说主要介绍四个方面的问题。二是作文的时态，从内容上来看，应该采用一般现在时。但在写作时应该知道，这是在写作文，故四个方面的问题不能逐个翻译，要上下连贯，形成有机的整体。
三在形成句子时，文章要有亮点，使用高级的句型结构，使文章显得语言不断变幻。
【亮点说明】所给范文中有两个显著的闪光点，一是开头所用主语从句恰到好处，使用了较复杂的句型结构。本句It’s a fact that we face more and more pressre in our life.是主语从句的典型例子，二是这篇文章紧扣题目要求，一语点破中心，例如第二自然段直接说明了所采取的措施。