Question

阅读下面材料，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

On the morning after the rainstorm, a man was walking on the beach, enjoying the beautiful view of the nature. Suddenly, he found thousands of starfish(海星) trapped in the shallow puddles(水坑) on the beach. As the sun rose, the water in the puddles was disappearing and the starfish began to struggle for life desperately. However, they still had no hopes to go back to the sea not far away.

As the man continued walking, he noticed a little boy picking up the starfish one by one and throwing them into the ocean. Then he went over and asked the boy, “What are you doing?” The boy replied, “I'm throwing starfish back into the water. If I leave them here, they’ll dry up and die.” The man said, “But look how many starfish there are. What you’re doing can’t possibly make a great difference to all of them.” As the boy picked up another starfish and threw it into the ocean, he said, “Well, it makes a difference to this one!” Then he added, “Though I can’t save all of them, I can make some of them survive with my efforts.”

Moved by the lovely and warm-hearted boy, the man bent down to pick up the struggling starfish and threw them into water. Every time he threw the starfish into the water, he felt their fate was changing.

【写作内容】

1、以约30个词概括短文的内容要点。

2、然后以约120个词就 “施助于人”的主题发表看法，内容包括：

（1）你如何评价故事中小男孩？

（2）叙述一次你真实或虚构的“施助于人”的经历。

（3）呼吁大家积极参与“施助于人”的活动。

【写作要求】

1、作文中可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

A man noticed a boy repeatedly picking up the trapped starfish and throwing them into the sea despite being unable to save all of them. Consequently, the man was moved and joined the boy to save the struggling starfish.

Reading the impressive story, I find the boy was so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise from all the people. Young as he was, he fulfilled what was incredible to people. Actually, the young boy set a good example, especially to the young.

My meaningful experience of offering help to a schoolmate will never escape from my memory. When I was in Senior Two, one of my schoolmates suffered from a severe and rare disease, which cost his parents all their savings and even put them heavily into debt. For lack of money, he was unable to get further medical treatment. Knowing this, I together with my classmates called for all the students and friends to collect money for him. It was our timely efforts that helped him out of hardships. Eventually he was saved.

As the saying goes, “A small act of kindness goes a long way.” Therefore, I appeal to all the people to get involved in the campaign of offering a hand to others. I think only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society.

【解析】

试题分析：首先要对材料进行简洁的概括；其次是以“施助于人”为话题写一篇作文。作文第一部分评价故事中的小男孩；第二部分叙述一次“施助于人”的经历；第三部分呼吁大家积极参与到“施助于人”中来。使用第一人称进行写作，不要出现拼写和时态错误。

亮点说明：范文使用了较多的重要语法知识：非谓语动词Reading the impressive story和Knowing this；结果状语从句so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise...；让步状语从句Young as he was；宾语从句what was incredible to people；时间状语从句When I was in Senior Two；定语从句which cost his parents all their savings和As the saying goes；强调句型It was our timely efforts that helped him out of hardships.；倒装句式only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society等，定语从句、让步状语从句、非谓语动词、强调句和倒装句等的使用，使作文的等级得到了提高，显示了较高的英语水平；

范文注意使用Actually, Therefore等衔接上下文，做到了语意连贯；

范文使用了较多的短语：set a good example to；offering help to；escape from；one of my schoolmates；suffered from；For lack of money；together with；called for；appeal to；get involved in等，使文章内容充实，有说服力。

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