Question

7．假如你是李明，目前正在英国学习．你在网上看到某宠物收容中心（DogsTrust）正在招募志愿者，请根据一下招聘信息，给中心负责人John Smith写一封申请信．

10 hours per week Working time：July 1-August 30，2014 Provide daily care for the dogs Assist training classes To apply：please email or post a covering letter （starting why you would be suitable ） to John Smith，Dogs Trust，17 Wakley Street，London．

注意：1．可适当增加细节使行文连贯；
       2．字数：120～150．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给网上一家宠物收容中心 （Dogs Trust） 的负责人John Smith写一封申请信，申请志愿者．写作时人称以第一人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．写作要点：1．写信目的； 2．申请支援者所符合的条件；3．期待收到回复．重要短语：write to sb（写信给…），on the Internet （在网上），the summer vacation （暑假），help sb with sth （帮助某人某事），To tell the truth （老实说），take care of …（照顾…），offered the chance（提供机会），attend sb/sth  （照顾…），gain work experience （得到工作经验），deal with…（处理…），hear from sb（收到某人来信）．
【高分句型】
1．I've just read about a notice on the Internet，saying you need some volunteers during the summer vacation．
这里是由现在分词saying+从句构成的伴随状语，主句为"I've just read about a notice on the Internet"，主句的主语为"I"与所给动词"say"构成逻辑上的主动关系，应该用现在分词．
2．Meanwhile，by volunteering I can gain work experience and confidence when dealing with problems．
这里是时间状语从句中的省略，完整结构为"when I am dealing with problems"，主句为"by volunteering I can gain work experience and confidence"，主句的主语与时间状语从句中的主语一致．

解答 DearJohn Smith，
I am Li Ming，now a studentin Britain．I am writing to you as to the volunteering work in Dogs Trust．I've just readabout a notice on the Internet，saying you need some volunteers during thesummer vacation．【高分句型】I hope I can help with your work．To tell the truth，I have loved to take careof dogs since I was a child，so I wish to be offered the chance．（写信目的-申请志愿者）
My summer vacation is fromJune 28 to August 30，2014，and every day I can spend more than two hours inthe center to attend the dogs or assist the training classes．I think the timewith the lovely dogs is wonderful．Meanwhile，by volunteering I can gain workexperience and confidence when dealing with problems．【高分句型】（申请支援者所符合的条件）
I'd appreciate it if youcould let me work for your Dogs Trust．【高分句型】And hope to hear from youpretty soon..（期待收到回复）
All the best．
Yours ever，
Li Ming

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．